Self lost in obsessive agony,
Your primal passion - a flaming ferocity,
The raging fire consumes your dignity,
And shame is put to slumber.
Seduced by the wayward twin of Love,
Power of deviation subdued,
On pathway of despair you tread:
A burden too heavy to bear.
Mind drowning in bitter-sweetened sensation,
Onto elusive dream you strive to hold fast,
but alas, it keeps vanishing like mirage in a vast
Desert: a lethal mix of hope and anxiety.
Raving lunatic you've become
Seeking savage-desire's fulfillment.
An ugly reflection of nature devoid of contentment.
Lust: a nightmare in the lonely bed of infatuation.
It is a brilliant poem on having touching expression and nice collocation. The penmanship is touching and nice. It is a lesson to the human society. I quote....... Raving lunatic you've become, Seeking savage-desire's fulfillment: An ugly reflection of nature devoid of contentment. - a nightmare in Infatuation's phoney bed. Thanks for sharing.10
Thanks my friend for your beautiful and insightful appraisal of the poem. Remain enriched.
'Collocation'? ? 'collocate /kŏl′ə-kāt″/ intransitive verb To place together or in proper order; arrange side by side. To occur in a collocation. Used of words' I never heard this word. : )
last stanza: I believed that unless a person (usually a male I imagine, but it may not be so) has 'his' satisfied, the may result in a crime OR WORSE! ! [[e.g. murder or suicide]] five stars ***** bri : )
stanza 3, line 3: To what/who does 'which' refer? ? I guess you are referring to the 'elusive dream'. Yes, a dream of sexual which is not fulfilled. RATS! ! !
Certainly unrequited love and unrequited may both lead to TROUBLE for both the lover/'luster' and the loved/'lusted after'
I especially enjoy your: 'wayward twin of Love' I MEAN I enjoy your use fo the words, NOT the idea of engaging in LUST, though I have visited at times. 'Love' and 'Lust' can both be enjoyable AND 'dangerous'.
In your message I think you typed An......., but PH shows The...... In either case, now I'll read and comment. ;)
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Metaphor, simile and deep meanings written in high poetic language, makes thinkers and intellectuals review their behaviours and personalities very often, in the light of this poem might they will criticize themselves as well. You write few poems but the quality is excellent. congratulations. it goes into my fav list 10++
Hi Soran, thanks a million times for your insightful appraisal of the poemp Remain enriched.