Jim Franckum


The Right Time To Die - Poem by Jim Franckum

The toddler sleeps with ashen cheeks and fingers pale and cold,
Across the street the crippled man regrets he still grows old.
Departure’s never easy, be it dusk or dawn or noon,
It seems to me we live too long, or else we die too soon.

Topic(s) of this poem: death, death of a friend, heaven, life and death, mystery


Comments about The Right Time To Die by Jim Franckum

  • Kim Barney (11/27/2016 8:24:00 PM)

    The Right Time To Die
    This poem flows well and has good rhyme. You have done a good job with this. I really like how you ended the poem with these lines:
    Departure’s never easy, be it dusk or dawn or noon,
    It seems to me we live too long, or else we die too soon.
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  • Dr.tony Brahmin (11/21/2015 2:35:00 PM)


    Departure’s never easy, be it dusk or dawn or noon,
    you picture the internal struggle of a man or a woman who cogitates on death. thank you for this great write. Tony
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  • Spock The Vegan (11/18/2015 10:16:00 AM)


    Good message and good meter. Good job! (Report) Reply

  • Souren Mondal (11/18/2015 12:52:00 AM)


    'MANY die too late and some die too early. Still the doctrine sounds strange: 'Die at the right time.'

    Die at the right time thus Zarathustra teaches.'

    - Friedrich Nietzsche...

    Your poem reminded me of this quote.. A poignant write Jim.. Thank you for sharing..
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    Jim Franckum Jim Franckum (11/18/2015 8:46:00 AM)

    Thanks for the kind words.

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (11/18/2015 12:25:00 AM)


    Wonderful poem shared for right time of death to have union with friend of heaven. Wise sharing....10 (Report) Reply

    Jim Franckum Jim Franckum (11/18/2015 8:49:00 AM)

    I am glad you liked the poem. thank you for the nice comment

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 18, 2015



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