Tinted Windows Poem by Craig Mize

Tinted Windows



grew up poor in the ghetto,
With little money to my family name.
My father worked plenty of jobs,
My mother did the same.
But still hand-me down clothes I wore,
Busted shoes on my feet.
And every time you look at me
Through them tinted windows,
A nigga is all that you see

I worked extremely hard in school,
Graduated at the top of my class.
Now I'm called the valedictorian at last.
Went on to excell in college,
On the dean's list I sat year after year.
Graduated with a master's degree
But through your tinted windows
Still a nigga is what you see.

I'm older now, a successful lawyer now.
I was able to move out of the ghetto,
In a gated community is where I now stay
Got plenty money now, even a new name,
Unfortunately my skin I couldn't change.
I did eveything that I could do,
For you to see me differently.
But looking through them tinted windows,
You still only see a nigga.

Saturday, July 1, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: racism,self discovery
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jefferson Carter 01 July 2017

Craig, I like the concept behind the poem. However, I don't get any sense of the rhythm animating the poem. If this is a formal poem, the meter has to be apparent. For instance, lines 12-13 have little to do with each other, rhythmically. Maybe read lots of good contemporary verse to improve? At the least, read the poem out loud and listen to how it sounds. If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it, and, if you do, perhaps share it with interested friends? Thanks! Yrs, JC

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Craig Mize

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gainesville GA
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