Diane Hine

Silver Star - 4,143 Points (25 July 1956)

Waning Cynical - Poem by Diane Hine

Saturdays at the patisserie,
I sometimes burn my arms, wrists or hands,
balancing hot pie trays and dodging chefs.
New scars overlie old, pink on brown on white.
I'm middle-aged Icarus with singed bat-wings,
in the slow burn of everyday life.
I plan on drowning in dementia,
I enjoy a good melodrama.


Comments about Waning Cynical by Diane Hine

  • Captain Cur (6/1/2012 8:58:00 AM)


    Warning demented:
    And all this time I thought I was drowning in brine. Let's see a dead Pirate Captain,
    sailing a phantom ship,  in love with a shifty (your word) mischievous impish Muse,
    an unreadable diary and a drunken parrot. Welcome to my world!
    The Malevolent sets sail each evening at 22: 00 at
    longitude (-74 degrees 0' 11) , Latitude (40 degrees 42' 23)
    She only sails at night. Oh! Yes! Bring some pastries for the crew.
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  • (6/1/2012 8:40:00 AM)


    Diane I understand by the last line that his is partly musings, but indeed we must ponder such matters without being consumed by the thought of them. Nice free form style. I was thinking you could make Palmier wings to replace those singed ones. I love the repeated scars reference. I am a long term blood donor and my arms look a bit like a junkies with lots of scar tissue. (Report) Reply

  • Hans Vr (6/1/2012 2:27:00 AM)


    Diane,
    I agree with Jay.
    Planning to drown in dementia is a scary thought, even the word cynical is in the title of the poem.
    I just hope that a medical cure is found soon for dementia. I have seen one of my very close family members drown in it is it is really cruel.
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  • (5/31/2012 11:43:00 PM)


    Hmmm...very different in style from your usual approach! Are you inhabiting a character here, or is this an actual, autobiographical kind of thing? I don't like to think of you injuring yourself! Drowning in dementia sounds scary. Definitely thought-provoking, and a bit troubling! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, May 31, 2012



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