Risha Ahmed (12 yrs)

Rookie - 0 Points (21/8/1998 / Cochin(India))

(004) A Snake In My Garden - Poem by Risha Ahmed (12 yrs)

One night I was in charge of the house
When my parents had gone out side
I was having loads of fun
With the radio blaring and paper planes that glide
Soon enough I got bored
So I went to the garden for a walk
When suddenly I saw a snake
Just next to a rock
It was definitely a snake
And it was the biggest one I have ever seen
It must have been a mile long
And its body was a sickening shade of green
I called the police, ambulance, fire department,
Forest officials and held a news conference
I waited feeling excited
While I clutched at the fence
Soon enough they poured in
And peered at the snake
They were amazed at its length
But no one the snake would touch or take
They gave me facts every ten minutes about the snake
And it’s a new species discovered, I learned
Just when I was going to have a closer look at the snake
My parents returned
My father looked angrily at the crowd
I got scared and scrunched up my toes
He asked “Can you explain why these people
Are crowding around my garden hose? ”

Comments about (004) A Snake In My Garden by Risha Ahmed (12 yrs)

  • Abhimanyu Kumar.s (11/19/2017 7:59:00 PM)

    Narrative technique well squeezed. Good (Report) Reply

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  • (2/2/2009 9:40:00 PM)

    You can be funny too! Again a 10 from me. (Report) Reply

  • (1/30/2009 1:14:00 PM)

    Great poem. I love the twist! (Report) Reply

  • (1/30/2009 12:28:00 PM)

    There is somebody else who always tricks me with poems, and now you are doing it
    too! Oh, what is the world coming to? I really like this one. You are a master story teller
    probably from historical genetic lines of story tellers, am I correct?
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  • (1/5/2009 7:31:00 PM)

    Amazing poetic story with a great sense of humor...10 for this. (Report) Reply

  • (12/29/2008 5:38:00 PM)

    wow... from start to end wonderful done
    the last part i laugh so hard it still hurts..10+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
    amazing is what you are...... Peace and happy new year
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  • premji premji (10/27/2008 5:34:00 AM)

    i will tell this poem to my little sons
    sure they will laugh a lot...
    +10 for a 10 year old...
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  • (5/5/2008 11:02:00 AM)

    risha, the police the firemen the press and every reader of this poem including me you turned each of us a fool using your garden hose! I really enjoyed your poetic naughtiness! God bless you! a ten out of ten for you! (Report) Reply

  • (3/23/2008 4:13:00 AM)

    so tender but so talented....beautiful poem (Report) Reply

  • Rajaram Ramachandran (3/14/2008 9:01:00 PM)

    What a wonderful joke I find at the end. It was a great suspense for me from the start to the end. (Report) Reply

  • (3/12/2008 8:59:00 AM)

    Wonderfully imaginative poem... I love the humor captured in the last line. (Report) Reply

  • (3/9/2008 12:32:00 PM)

    What an interesting event!
    Oy my...one mile long snake!
    I'm thrilled, my little brave child! I'm really thrilled!

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, March 9, 2008

Poem Edited: Tuesday, August 26, 2008

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