(377) Turbulent Crippled Emotions (Part Two) Poem by Melvina Germain

(377) Turbulent Crippled Emotions (Part Two)

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The neighbours watched day by day
wondering what was coming their way.
Slowly constructed to great surprise,
a mish mash of wire, haunted their eyes.

Surpassing the city’s bylaw in height,
overlapped wood on wire, a sight.
Enormous structure, extremely tall,
surely soon to topple and fall.

Passers by look on in dismay,
shaking their heads while walking away.
A gloomy picture to be sure,
no real-estate agent would adore.

Neighborhood property value decreased.
Renters will not renew their lease.
A smirk rests upon her soured face,
she has created a neighborhood disgrace.

Working by night, sleep by day.
creating more fence for morning display.
Neighbors feared facing the morning sun,
for what this night-worker may have done.

The message she sends is very clear,
stay out of my life or beware.
Her mind diffused, a complex puzzle.
What comes next could grow and double.

To be continued…….

Writen: January 12/07

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Diane Violet 14 January 2007

The city is not going to like this one either! Grow and double..........Whoa! ! I think it's time for the neighborhood to get together, help her build a fence that everyone can live with. Hopefully it's not to late for a gate................to acceptance. Wonderful write Melvina............Looking forward to Part 3................Diane

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Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 14 January 2007

You've turned the burners up, my dear....This series is firing up with anxiety & intrigue! WELL CRAFTED & ASTUTE PROGRESSION OF ANTICIPATION.... FJR

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Brian Dorn 17 January 2007

Melvina, you've certainly constructed this poem up to code... I can hardly wait for phase three! ! Brian

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David Harris 18 January 2007

An excellent part two. Can't wait for part three. Hope it is soon. David

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Great imagery Melvina that pulled me through making me want to get to the end and discover what was in store for this woman...and her neighbors! I have to admit it gave me a smile to see the retaliation factor after how she was treated as if she we nothing....and then how she held the final card by making things worse for her neighbors. This poem makes me feel sorry for both sides...her and her neighbors who worry about their property value...I too would worry if that was built next door to me! ! ((Smile)) ANother great write.......... *Shelley*

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Yeah, good progression, you've got me now! ...... Ez

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Chelsi Ruffing 05 July 2007

It seems to be gettting with each time. Great work. I can't wait to read part three!

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Andrew mark Wilkinson 05 July 2007

Yes i love a looney tune.. great part 2

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Sid John Gardner. 20 January 2007

Melvina I have the solution to the offending structure.Its called 'The nightrider bulldozer'.I like this one cant wait to see the outcome! ! ! ! Take Care, Sid John.

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Melvina Germain

Melvina Germain

Sydney, Nova Scotia
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