A Bag Of Seeds Poem by Danny Draper

A Bag Of Seeds

Rating: 5.0


Is the selfless heart not most self consumed?
Selfishly conceited by greater goods'
Dimly lit imperfect passage
To intoxication by self-righteous fervour?
Offering or imposing?
Is thankless prize sweet elusive wine or
Tainted chalice of dubious agenda?
Or do we crave cheap success, but success?
Samaritan or charlatan,
Manipulator or naïve innocent,
Needy, or grace and splendour,
Does decisive drive a difference make,
Or delude a fake pretender?
If change and strength in wisdom rise
Lockstep in wealth we grow,
Bag of seeds a crop does found
But many hands it sews.
Green eyes scrutinize from empty hands
Blind to transparent view
Is so cynical who hauled the sack
Coveting husk bedded buds, dancing
Concealed stalks shadows?
Despised autocrat despicable rat
Or dreamer with a shared vision that
Alarmingly, conceals no untoward, but
To rest in the shade
Of trees we have planted
Sharing fruits we have nurtured
Supping their flesh and juices
Succour for our toiled endeavours
And watch the forest perpetuate;
‘This our true reward?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Karen Deeks 07 March 2012

This covers just about everyone and quite rightly so. We all have our own agenda and loyalties needs and wants. To me the ones who strive the hardest to prove their being near to the challis can be the most short sighted individuals. (I do not mean all but many) I have a few prime examples in my head right now :) . Re poetic flow. You mastered it with finery in this piece (according to me) as i read aloud it just oozed off a poetic sounding Tongue. I love the change of patter, which seemed twice after the start and the end slowed down perfectly for a thought moment finale. Bravo for an inspirational piece laced with fine words.

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Vanessa Hughes 07 March 2012

Very well written danny. I think it matters not what agenda others may have, that's their own problem. If you take everything at face value, I don't think it would be you suffering as a consequence. Great poem, really enjoyed thinking about it.

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Valerie Dohren 05 February 2013

Seem to have missed this one Danny - interesting and thought-provoking, leads one to question one's own agenda. Just remains for PH to allow me to actually send this comment! !

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Adeline Foster 02 March 2012

Interesting poem. Have you read mine - Trees - It was meant to be just an observation. Somehow it became a message. Adeline

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Owain Glyn 13 June 2013

I do think that often charitable acts are performed more for the benefit of the giver rather than the good of the recipient, you ask the question well

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Ken E Hall 03 August 2014

The seeds of life explained so well what we sow is what we get a good lesson for us all...very well composed...regards

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Soulful Heart 14 March 2014

cravings, misgivings, pains, joys, grey shades, bright shades all a panorama through a heart that makes our being.............so thoughtful

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Kevin Patrick 15 January 2014

A wonderful mixture of rhythm and language had to read it a couple of times, I interpret this about the act of altruism or good will, can a person make a truly selfless act or does there desire for them to help enriched by a belief that they them selves are actually selfish as a wall street banker out for the honey pot? I know that when I volunteer its out of a mutual interest to help but also get myself into the community and actually do something for myself. The last few lines really delve into the debate, growing something for doing something good or the reward in itself. Perhaps its both, still awesome stuff.

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Valsa George 13 November 2013

The motivation and the agenda behind our actions are often not clearly definable! We are unable to say if our heart is selfless or self cosumed! Are we samaritan or charlaton? Cannot say! ! A great write inviting self introspection! !

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Lyn Paul 10 July 2013

So well written Danny. These seeds are the steps for our next generation

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Kiama, New South Wales, Australia
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