When all the trees are tall and still
and Sun is shouldered on a hill,
Shadows drench a cooling gully
and nocturnal eyes begin to stir.
When all the wings of day are rested
and talk of roosts by owners tested,
Fear of enemies concedes to sleep
and dark conceals its masses.
When all the hearts in unison beat
and world's in silence are replete,
Uniformly all are equal as by magic
and little animals start their night.
When all the hunters stalk night prey
and quarry seek out gifts of day,
Fragments from the hectic lighted
and waste from haste abounds.
When all the raptors spy and swoop
and snatch a scurrier in their coup,
Gullets swell or offspring sated
and life rolls on its drama.
When all the gatherers fill and load
and larders swell in cramped abode,
They live to rest another day
and skilled to favour the bold.
When all the trees in milk light shimmer
and Moon is rising all a glimmer,
Pale beams wax a cautious gully,
and diurnal eyes do not stir.
Danny im going to swear now! wait for it...Ruddy Gorgeous! ! ! ! ! ! I adore this one so so much...sun is shouldered on a hill....sigh.... This is absoposolutely my favourite ever....more than a 10 sits on your shoulders now... a might fine piece of canopy lace..........love it.... Bet you cant guess who's a tad enthusiastic on this piece.... cest moi... :) Sorry... calms down and walks of back to reality
ahhh... i just reviewed this an d said how much i adore this perfect 10 and some write and the sun shouldered on a hill is just breathtaking... then i went a tad loopy..... then i commented bout having to return to earth with a bump.... and it disappeared.... grrr....... love it... love it.... :) top notch all rounder... stashed in me favs
Rhyming nice the life on the surface. So many dimensions have taken their shapes by the fantastic imagery. Yet solitude I feel the key word unuttered single time yet. Perhaps it is the skill of match-making. Enjoyed the rhyming journey to illustrate the uniqueness.......Regards, Pranab................10+
Read this one for the second time and am still impressed. Read mine - Trees - Adeline
A composition that is both creative and compelling. Well done my friend!
A fabulous night time imagery poem, one of yor classic masterpieces. And ooh the rhyme scheme, awesome. So nice to read u again, Danny!
Love the tension this creates with the smooth flow and atmospheric rhyme of the first two lines (very Poe-like) followed by the last two lines of each stanza. 10+ from me!
Yup i think i can do that lol....had trouble pronouncing diurnal but the rest just flowed as i read aloud....i shall certainly ive it a whirl....london poetry corners brace yourself lol just touting for which looks best....
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Beautiful poem Danny, makes night-time sound delightful.