A Beggar Maid's Breakdown In The Life Cycle Poem by nimal dunuhinga

A Beggar Maid's Breakdown In The Life Cycle

Rating: 3.7

This beguile strange woman in her forties and I am sorry that I have heard forties are the naughtiest.
She begs not charity and she has enough money.
Even though the solitude and suffering.
The precious money could help her to replace solace?
Under the burning Sun and freezing Moon
Still she needs the warmth.
Only an honest human blanket could minimize her nauseous feelings.
Where do they find this pedigree?
She seeks a pure bred Man in her sojourn
And still she struggles to find the needle in a haystack.

Sandra Fowler 18 November 2006

All human beings need warmth. Another fascinating story, Nimal. Ten without hesitation. Kindest regards, Sandra

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Alison Cassidy 19 November 2006

Nimal, I think you're spot on about women in their forties (from my experience LOL) and I love the story you tell and the 'needle in the haystack' metaphor. Yes, the closeness of another body is so important at any age. A thoughtful and wise poem. love, Allie xxxxxxxxxxxx

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Ranjith Wijekoon 19 November 2006

Dear Nimal, Pepole on the wrong side of 40 and ALONE could enjoy this better. Excellent stuff. Best Regards, Ranjith

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Dr. Kolitha Lelwala 26 November 2006

Dear Nimal, great...... 'Human Blanket' has enlighten your poem.......... It's a great pleassure to read these precious words. Metta........ Kolitha

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Roy Storey 27 January 2007

Hi i not been this way for a while, this is a good poem money dos not get the things you need in life, its the travling of it, that what life you need. Take care my friend. Roy.

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R. H. Peat 03 February 2010

Weather you mean this to be comical or not. This is the funniest thing I've ever read. The off-handedness of the presentation like the gossip of old women is just so telling of the character that the poem displays as someone in dire need of a man for happiness. Which comes to be described as the needle in the haystack. What a sexual pun that is. It's the perfect cliche. A poet friend// RH Peat

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Paul Hansford 11 December 2009

The last two lines are very sharp and accurate, well expressed.

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Ken E Hall 10 December 2009

Interesting tale of a maiden waiting for the right soulmate A theme you have wrote which is a fact of life good write ++++10 thanks for meditate note I do yoga every day and mqarried to a yoga teacher regards

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Patrick A. Martin 16 November 2009

In so many ways this is a very sad tale my friend Loneliness is such a terrible thing to ache for the comfort of another is in a way a torment on its own,

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Shashendra Amalshan 31 May 2009

very interesting..entertaining write indeed...liked it very much...hey who told you woman in forties are naughties, i liked the phrase thoguh..very touching and moving towards the end too..nice//thanks

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nimal dunuhinga

nimal dunuhinga

kalubovila East, Sri Lanka
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