A Beginning Poem by Ben Gieske

A Beginning

Rating: 3.4


white canvas
................all bleached
what first
................a broad wash
across the horizontal
................hesitation
this is not art
................so much waiting
for the details

what will blend
what will bleed

so much there
before we started looking
now the changes
................the seasons
................the reasons

Published on-line by Ink Sweat & Tears for Feb.12,2008
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- composed Oct.18,2007

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ivan Donn Carswell 21 February 2008

Ben, the blank canvas analogy is well used here; you've kept the starkness in a spare use of words... Rgds, Ivan

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Duncan Wyllie 29 February 2008

When we see with a new- start aproach, somehow we can see so much clearer Love duncan X

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Lillian Thomas 13 May 2009

In the best of modern poetry tradition, it is an energy construct, which is to say, it excites poems in the reader. I have tried 3 times to read it and every time my mind interrupts me with images that have been rattling around in my head for years trying to be written. Finally on 4th try i finished it. What a little beauty!

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Meggie Gultiano 03 April 2009

i have to read and re read this, Ben.. ilove this..

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Ashraful Musaddeq 23 October 2008

Much told in brief. Form is new. Love it. 10+

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Aine Ní Leidhin 01 March 2008

This abstract sensation conveys a perception, not only of a plant but also of the stem, leaves, habitat with simultaneous olfactory. Meaningful arrangement of sense and smell mix-ed up with ideas feelings and thoughts. Kind regards Aine

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Robert Howard 29 February 2008

I love this poem Ben and congratulate you on its on line publication. Everything that has ever sprung out of the imagination of one of our fellow human specimens was preceded by a blank canvas and the desired to imprint with the spirit of creation.

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