abhimanyu kumar.s

Freshman - 700 Points (31.12.1988 / venkatgiri kota)

A Captive Wing - Poem by abhimanyu kumar.s

Never before I imagined
Pushed down and removed
Suddenly it raised in my actions
Pushing slowly and silently
Ask the missing owls and dark nights
How I get dumb departed
From such mysterious elements of love.

Few cracks and sparks
With rocket speed pierce and
Form a substance in my distance
Far it goes in her proceedings
Ceiling my imagination over searches
Perceptions and distress treatments
All at a naked eye and life.

Comments about A Captive Wing by abhimanyu kumar.s

  • Juan Guzman (6/22/2012 10:18:00 AM)

    Every single line is written wonderfully, but each line feels un-connected to the next line and there is no unity in the poem. I will read another poem by you and comment. I hope to see a more togethor poem. (Report) Reply

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  • (3/17/2012 1:32:00 PM)

    Wow Impressive, I love the rythm. Amazing talent you have, what a gift. Go on! Keep going & don't stop, reach for the stars! :) (Report) Reply

  • (3/8/2012 3:06:00 AM)

    Never before I imagined
    Pushed down and removed
    Suddenly it raised in my actions the people in our life makes us put our best foot forward...as a poet you do just that...the mind is a wonder of wonders as is your writing...GREAT!
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  • (1/26/2012 3:26:00 PM)

    Nice flow... vivid words... strong talent here (Report) Reply

  • (1/14/2012 10:47:00 AM)

    Here the feelings are not revealed, yet the desire is overpassing all the being of the lover. Until the emotions are expressed aloud, this love remains unreachable/forbidden/infantuated/mute. The lover is like a peeping tom without malice. I like this poem a lot! Keep-on aspiring and sharing your compo. (Report) Reply

  • (11/14/2011 1:35:00 AM)

    well in captivating her as well as the readers.10 (Report) Reply

  • (11/9/2011 3:45:00 AM)

    This is really good! I love these poems too, I love your writing style. (Report) Reply

  • (11/7/2011 5:17:00 AM)

    this poem is superb and you have good way of putting up your feelings.10 (Report) Reply

  • (11/2/2011 2:55:00 AM)

    a well constructed sonnet on love. brilliant (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, October 29, 2011

Poem Edited: Saturday, October 29, 2011

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