Mohammad Akmal Nazir

Rookie - 10 Points (Bahraich, U.P. India)

*a Humble Complaint* - Poem by Mohammad Akmal Nazir


You could have been more polite observing me,
Your harsh words have left
An indelible impression,
Hatred can be won by love alone,
As one gets relief from
Scorching heat
By gentle rain,
As the sermon of a saint soothes
The disturbed mind,
Your words could have healed
The wounds of my heart,
For once you touched me, felt me,
And covered your being with my love,
As you said,
You smelt my love and called it red rose,
What's happened now?
Thorns have grown on my lips,
My being has become the grave of your hatred,
Is it a diversion
Or you're posing to be more sensible?

Comments about *a Humble Complaint* by Mohammad Akmal Nazir

  • (11/21/2016 4:11:00 PM)

    Beautiful use of words. I can relate to what is meant... thank you for sharing. (Report) Reply

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  • Kumarmani Mahakul (8/29/2016 9:46:00 PM)

    Expressive and impressive composition. Thanks. (Report) Reply

  • (9/17/2015 5:40:00 PM)

    A poignant and an expressive write. (Report) Reply

  • Precia Liz (12/27/2014 8:20:00 AM)

    nice poem, i liked it... (Report) Reply

  • Akhtar Jawad (6/26/2014 6:25:00 AM)

    Nice idea, nice poem. (Report) Reply

  • Bothwell T Murindagomo (4/9/2014 2:31:00 AM)

    Wow, wow. Love the way u have played with simple words but bringing out exactly what the heart is feeling. (Report) Reply

  • Nyagaka Charles (1/7/2014 1:22:00 AM)

    real life...lovely piece. (Report) Reply

  • (2/29/2012 5:30:00 PM)

    Nice piece of creative intelligence. I envy u. Kip it coming (Report) Reply

  • (1/10/2012 11:19:00 PM)

    B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L...WELL WRITTEN (Report) Reply

  • (1/10/2012 7:22:00 PM)

    Exellent! ! :) i loved it. 10 (Report) Reply

  • (1/8/2012 6:07:00 PM)

    this poem reminds me of a saying in my country where your title means the same, i love its simplicity in words.wonderful poem with wise sentences. (Report) Reply

  • Nadood Al Nasser (11/17/2011 1:49:00 PM)

    Beautiful and amazing. Well done my friend, u have just created a masterpiece! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Marcus Mckinley (10/17/2011 12:18:00 PM)

    criticism is always hardest to take from someone you love.
    nicely written
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  • (10/10/2011 8:38:00 PM)

    Wow, very impressive! I love the way you describe things. Lovable! I rate it a perfect 10.: -) (Report) Reply

  • (10/7/2011 2:20:00 PM)

    Indeed this is a great poem.i dont even how to congratulate you
    this is a kind of situation which most lovers go through.your poem
    spoke to all of us who fall a victim to this not jyst a great poem but an excellent
    one.THUMBS UP
    (Report) Reply

  • James Atil (9/19/2011 4:29:00 PM)

    Excellent! The emotion is there and I can see no reason to rate this 10.
    More power! Let's support each other in one way or another my friend...just visit my site
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  • (8/23/2011 7:13:00 AM)

    I had to read it again...and yes I still love it as much as the first time read it.

    Thank you for posting such a wonderful poem
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  • B. J. Ayers (8/22/2011 12:15:00 PM)

    A very nice write, indeed...I rate it a very strong 9.5
    B J Ayers
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  • (8/8/2011 7:45:00 PM)

    A 'Humble Complaint' of a bitter-sweet love.Good write, Thanks for your comment about my poem. Keep writing about everday truths, but there're times when we can venture out into the universe (the light) and travel beneath the earth (darkness) both light and darkess give us both. Again, thanks for reading my poem! (Report) Reply

  • Ezediuno Louis Odinakaose (8/2/2011 6:40:00 AM)

    Thanks for reading my poem.
    I love yours, the title of one who is willing to give another chance.
    Your discriptive expressions shows flexible imagination and good use of words with smooth flow of language.
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, November 27, 2010

Poem Edited: Wednesday, July 6, 2011

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