' A Small Attempt To Capture... ' Poem by indira babbellapati

' A Small Attempt To Capture... '

Rating: 2.7


there's the sea
there's the sky
the moon and the wind too
a picture perfect setting
for you and i
but
you aren't you
i'm not i

inheritors of the promordial fire
we're just the carriers of the
principle that governs nature
to probe and penetrate
the mysterious and mystic
depths and spaces
teasing man for eons
to undo all the knots
to unravel our existence
at each penetration
at each probing
to reach that fleeting moment
of non-existence
severed from the body connect
detached from the earth-bounds

the elements will never cease
the fire will keep burning
but
you'll not be you
and i'll not be i

07jun2010
12.40hrs

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

:) . and one thing is diffinite about me, God breathe life into me. :) . the rest, the flesh is belongs to the universe. but that soul of mine, is the lords.. :) . the poem has some truth. :) . the carbon is you may have been shared by einstein or newton, or King Solomon. :)

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Sandra Fowler 17 June 2010

While it is true that there is nothing new under the sun, this is a very compelling piece of work. Excellent, Indira. Love, Sandra

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Nimal Dunuhinga 19 June 2010

Perfect.! ...........under one roof two chracters live as one but there are two souls?

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Rm. Shanmugam Chettiar 22 June 2010

extremly well and well appealing. marks 10

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Bharati Nayak 22 October 2019

there's the sea there's the sky the moon and the wind too a picture perfect setting for you and i but you aren't you i'm not i inheritors of the promordial fire we're just the carriers of the principle that governs nature - - - - - - - -A wonderful poem of love and nature.We are governed by the forces of nature.

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Edward Kofi Louis 12 June 2016

The mystics of life! Thanks for sharing.

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Prateep Sengupta 15 July 2010

The second and the last stanzas are marvellous. The inevitable trends of live have been effectively implied.

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Gita Ashok 06 July 2010

the elements will never cease the fire will keep burning but you'll not be you and i'll not be i Wonderful and thought-provoking lines!

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Rachel Butler 23 June 2010

'to reach that fleeting moment of non-existence' Rachel Ann Butler

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