A Sweet Sixteen Poem by Bano Ali

A Sweet Sixteen

Rating: 4.9


I am only forty eight,
I don't count the years before I met you,
My life started when I met you,
Or I am even younger than that,
Because I subtract the time passed,
That I loose due to your absence,
A careful calculation,
I passed only sixteen years with you,
So what's wrong,
If you find me only sixteen,
A sweet sixteen!

Wednesday, July 29, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: aging
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This is my first English Poem, I don't know whether I succeeded in writing an English Poem or not.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Akhtar Jawad 30 July 2015

An amazing poem, the real phenomenal woman! ................................10

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Valsa George 02 August 2015

So you mean to say that your meeting with the one referred here was so crucial that you count your years only from thence! That shows how important that other person is in your life! A good poem affirming your great love for the other! I am glad to comment on your first English poem! Now you can confidently proceed! Wish you all the Best!

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Roseann Shawiak 26 September 2015

Wonderful poem! Had to smile when reading it! A simple calculation to find your love in years with another, is astounding and filled with the love you have had with them. Really great poem, I loved it! Thank you for sharing. RoseAnn

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M Asim Nehal 27 September 2015

Well I am now a fifteen years old now.........You gave me a reason to feel young and energetic.Loved it.

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Rajnish Manga 02 October 2015

Congratulations. Full marks. Had you not mentioned in the Notes, nobody could have guessed it to be your first poem in English. The subject is not an easy one but you have given it a befitting treatment worthy of an old master. Thanks, and all the best.

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Me Poet Yeps Poet 23 March 2019

FOR EVER BE GREEN AND ALWAYS REMAIN SIXTEEN @80 NOW I STILL AM 19 NINETEEEEEEEEEEEEN ALWAYS SHALL REMAIN 19

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Dr Antony Theodore 26 November 2018

My life started when I met you, Or I am even younger than that, Because I subtract the time passed, A very interesting way of expression of love and age. nice poem. i smiled.. thank u. tony

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Kumarmani Mahakul 19 November 2018

A careful calculation, I passed only sixteen years with you, So what's wrong, If you find me only sixteen, A sweet sixteen! .......so touching and romantic. A beautiful poem so nicely executed. Though it is a first written poem by you, yet it is most interesting to read. Thank you dear madam for sharing this lofty one.

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You are less then sixteen if you subtract his periodic absences. A good English poem to write at such young age, indeed. Well crafted.

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Abduhoo Salamath 23 August 2016

excellent poem...sweet sixteen really sweet...as poem too..

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