A Walk Through The Cemetry Poem by okoye charles

i think i finally got what you were trying to say in the last few stanzas. how everything is equal in death? or something along those lines. :) anyway, really awesome poem!

Okoye - I like your contrast between the corrupt outside world and the innocence of the cemetery... You recreate a convincing scene with your vivid descriptions... I enjoyed this. jim

Great piece of work. Keep it and let us also learn from you. Thank you. E.K.L.

This is a good poem. I think some words can be taken out so the rhyme feels less forced.In my opinion editing our work is often about getting rid of unrrdrd words. I think someone is less likely to finish the read if there is more description, simale or metaphor than required for the poem. Like I said though this is a good and well read poem, so verry fer words taken out would make this the epitomic version of this writting. The best we can do is the best we can do..lol.

Very interesting. I love the rhythm

The dead live in serenity, verily! An illuminating poem

a strong message conveyed here..beautifully expressed..after all this is the final destination of the physical body

At the end of the journey of life, we all are equal when we lay in our final bed. again a nice poem. A friendly advice, just mind the grammar a little bit :))

I think this is a fine piece of well observed poetry with a real message. Obviously written from the heart it shows the finer side of you, the poet. If you want me to critique the poem from a grammatical viewpoint please message me, I would be happy to do so. Well written.