Mohammad Akmal Nazir

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A World Of Treason - Poem by Mohammad Akmal Nazir

Let's see the world with an open eye,
And take it as a bivouac not destination,
Its love is false and nature sly,
It's an obstacle in the way of emancipation.
It will betray you when you need it most,
What is there in it to make you please?
All that you gain here will be lost,
It's like a prison and will not release.
Greed and lie are its ultimate rewards,
Hopes are trampled and hearts broken,
Nothing except
trouble it awards,
Your own loved ones are brutally foresaken.
Why should we trust such a useless thing
Which is certainly selfish and not fit to cling.


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  • (8/5/2011 8:17:00 PM)

    nice poem akmal...keep it up :) (Report)Reply

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  • Juan Olivarez (7/24/2011 4:25:00 PM)

    Sadly you have captured a great truth, grim, abysmal but true, thank you for sharing. (Report)Reply

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  • C.R. Clark (7/22/2011 9:40:00 AM)

    I think you have an excellent form in this work. I like poems that flow easily as they are read and this one certainly fits that scenario. If by the 'world' you mean the inhabitants, I understand your statements as people can certainly be dissappointing at times. I have to say, I dissagree with your assessment of the world. I see this as possibly written about a temporary emotional experience. I have such a poem (entitled 'Irrelevant') . It does not describe Me at all, but it does describe the way I felt at the moment I wrote it. I enjoyed your poem a great deal. Thanks for the invite.
    Richard
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  • (7/22/2011 5:54:00 AM)

    Well I suppose this is ONE way of looking at the world Mohd! Luckily for me, I don't see it that way.

    I see a world of beauty.
    A world where to live to the fullest,
    is our god given duty.

    I see a world forsaken
    by its inhabitants
    I see a world shaken
    to its very fragile core.

    I see a world in trouble
    Therefore, in this world
    My efforts must be doubled

    For our children and our children's children
    It is up to us to put the brakes on our obsession
    to fight. In peace
    We shall see the light.

    Thank you for directing me to your poem
    It was interesting.

    Smiling at you

    Tai
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  • (7/20/2011 3:56:00 PM)

    Hey, Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my post! I read 'A World Of Treason' and i loved it. It is true that people do have an ugly side and love does hurt! I also read some of your other poems and I like them so I think ill keep looking at your poems, and if you could try and let me know if you post a new one because Id love to read it! ! Love from Nebraska. (Report)Reply

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  • Hans Vr (7/20/2011 9:41:00 AM)

    On and off, we tend to feel like the world is a world of treason. I can understand and surely have been there. Your descritpion is very poetic.However, these are the times it is really worth to take some time to count our blessings. These are the times it is really worth to try and tune in and connect to our Creator. I recently read 'the poet' by RW Emmerson and I really recommend this author and specifically this essay to all. (His essay are freely available on the internet) (Report)Reply

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  • (7/20/2011 7:28:00 AM)

    An honest look from a darker side, seeing both sides is the only real way to repair the damage. ___Ten___ (Report)Reply

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  • Seun Bewaji (7/19/2011 8:07:00 AM)

    this is the true nature of human, and my wonder is why should reason be so universal l rank it 10 for it touches nearly everyone's heart. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/19/2011 7:39:00 AM)

    It's an unfair and bleak world sometimes, though we wouldn't know colours without the black and grey. I like it. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/18/2011 10:19:00 PM)

    A great poem, its a good way of looking at the world with towards eyes not only one. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/18/2011 11:08:00 AM)

    This is a great poem, not many people see the word with two eyes, but you do. (Report)Reply

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  • Kiran Sam (7/18/2011 5:10:00 AM)

    If only mad-rushing world would just stop by and listen to such true words, grr888 poem again. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/18/2011 4:38:00 AM)

    Yes we are slaves to money the root of all evil since time began we are never free in this world the poem looks thru the eye of truth and sees only falsehoods, that's what I feel.in the poem ++++++10...regards (Report)Reply

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  • (7/17/2011 1:01:00 PM)

    Your lines are powerful, great message...beautiful words..love reading your poems brother Akmal! A great 10. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/17/2011 6:36:00 AM)

    This depth thinking poem is two thumbs... I like it very much. (Report)Reply

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  • (3/27/2011 7:55:00 AM)

    this poem is so powerful and has so much meaning (Report)Reply

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  • Malaya Roses (3/27/2011 6:22:00 AM)

    LOVE WITHOUT COMPASSION JUST A LUST WITH SOON FADING COLOR! ! !

    Love could do more damage & good... far greater than ever expected! !

    Well done.
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Poem Submitted: Sunday, March 27, 2011

Poem Edited: Monday, July 18, 2011


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