In the depths of silence
Pits of despair
Holes of doubt
Pierces the air
Yearning for just
Another human presence
To pass the time with-
A black hole sucked me in
And won't let go
As much as I tug and shake
Beg and cry
I fell off a cliff
And the sea welcomed me
Three hundred feet below
Swallowing me whole
creative use of structure to convey a sense of falling, a sense of being sucked in. A truly imaginative write.
wonderful write.....with brilliant style and thoughts... you are not alone...we are here...(smile) realistic piece..there are times in our lives that we feel we are alone.... feel the hollowness inside us....just a part of life.... a very good write Leslie....10++++
Beautiful poem and i agree with Kiran Such a beautiful elevated mind can never be alone come on cheer up 10+
i think that this is an amazing poem.. but sometimes, when people feel like they are alone, they arent. they just need to find the light in their day and keep themselves motivated to get out of the horrific situation they are in. and once they are out, they will look back and realize how strong they were to not give up.
I hear ya. I can relate alot. Can't say its an enjoyable read with the nature of it and all, but definitely I can relate and understand the sentiment. Good Poem xD
No Don't Leave Me Here Alone...... showing enough maturity with skill.... enjoyedthe poem.....10
Rich with reality and crammed with creativity. Well written my friend.10/10
Great poetic talent and maturity of thought. It left me wonder struck that you could write it at so young an age. Keep it up. CP
Profound thoughts and fabulous expression...from a talented young prodigy!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.I would like to translate this poem
A well delivered piece, very talented young lady, keep up the good work.