Arm: needle;
Needle: arm.
Can’t wait for you
To become better acquainted.
Existence: rapture;
Rapture: existence.
I don’t think you’ve
Met before, have you?
Violence: robbery;
Robbery: violence.
It looks like you
Were made for each other.
Depression: elation;
Elation: depression.
You could almost be
Two sides of the same coin.
Body: grave;
Grave: body.
I sense the start
Of a long-term acquaintance.
©2005 Jon Lloyd
A nice balance. Simple and very effective use of language to convey a powerful message. I like this.
Sincerely hope Jon, these words aren't a precursor to a terrifying existence?
A well-composed piece with an appropriate form. The last two lines are terrifying in their acceptance. t x
Strange poem but I did enjoy it...a lot of different meanings can be read from it. KK
Crazy but I like it! Here's hoping you're a diabetic! ! HG: -) xx
THIS IS A GREAT WRITE JON! KUDOS. ALWAYS AN EXISTENTIAL DILEMMA//////\\\\\\ALMOST A TAUNT IN YOUR ART - with dichotomy like 'keep on livin' or get on with dyin'.' THE THEME IS PROVACATIVE AND YOUR DELIVERY FLAWLESS. George, *likin' the writin'*
tenoutoften Jon, profoundly (well) written, above excellent, chilling realisation... x
I agree...This poem is simple yet deep, each word pairing fits like a glove. The last line is macabre & realistic, which makes it all the more scary..... A gem of a poem. Sincerely Nickie x x
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Simple yet deep. Simple yet deep. Neat one Jon.