Beautiful Queen. Poem by J.A McManus

Beautiful Queen.

Rating: 5.0

God’s warm breath caresses my naked neck
Below a hundred streams softly sing
Standing here upon this heavenly place
Makes me feel as mighty as a king.

The wild flowers sway and dance tenderly
Through endless fields of emerald green
They are truly a vision to behold
Though not as beautiful as my queen.

Eyan Desir 15 September 2009

Haha nice poem....sweet Not the ending I thought It would be.10s

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Shelly Shelly 15 September 2009

nice divinity is there in poem.. i personally think you must revisit this again.. 10

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I like the backdropp of heaven in this short but lingering poem, not to forget th beauty of dancing flowers and the endless fields of green. The queen makes a grand entrance to make this poem a totally fulfilling one. 10 love Karin

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Georgia Girl 15 September 2009

This is gorgeous and to say that as beautiful as nature is, even IT doesn't compare...that is saying beautifully said with few words too. :)

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John Knight 15 September 2009

Hi John - a lovely poem with good form - two balanced quatrains and a consistent rhyme pattern x a x a in bothe verses. It needs a little work on the FLOW (METRE) but i will discuss this with you. The two verses balance each other. In verse one - Nature complements his Sovereignity. In verse two the beauty of nature complements the beauty of his QUEEN. Because of the delicacy of the words and their structure I will award it a MAX for elegance, Yours in poetry - JOHN

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Ken E Hall 07 February 2010

Your queen could wish for nothing more of your accolade shining in your poem which is excellent...++++10 regards

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Jake Shelvey 17 January 2010

Beautiful..I am so glad I read your poems, they are amazing! ! Oozing imagination and imagery!

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Dean Mcinerney 13 October 2009

I love it! ! Its so rich in imagery! !

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Patti Masterman 06 October 2009

This is a style I always feel comfortable with; where the voice of the poem seems to take on an additional personality, somewhere out of time; and the self is super present and super conscious of everything, and kind of balances above it all like a benediction. Really enjoyed this.

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Luwi Habte 25 September 2009

beautiful poem for a beautiful queen from a beautiful poet luwi

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J.A McManus

J.A McManus

Carlisle, Cumbria
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