God’s warm breath caresses my naked neck
Below a hundred streams softly sing
Standing here upon this heavenly place
Makes me feel as mighty as a king.
The wild flowers sway and dance tenderly
Through endless fields of emerald green
They are truly a vision to behold
Though not as beautiful as my queen.
nice divinity is there in poem.. i personally think you must revisit this again.. 10
I like the backdropp of heaven in this short but lingering poem, not to forget th beauty of dancing flowers and the endless fields of green. The queen makes a grand entrance to make this poem a totally fulfilling one. 10 love Karin
This is gorgeous and to say that as beautiful as nature is, even IT doesn't compare...that is saying alot....so beautifully said with few words too. :)
Hi John - a lovely poem with good form - two balanced quatrains and a consistent rhyme pattern x a x a in bothe verses. It needs a little work on the FLOW (METRE) but i will discuss this with you. The two verses balance each other. In verse one - Nature complements his Sovereignity. In verse two the beauty of nature complements the beauty of his QUEEN. Because of the delicacy of the words and their structure I will award it a MAX for elegance, Yours in poetry - JOHN
Your queen could wish for nothing more of your accolade shining in your poem which is excellent...++++10 regards
Beautiful..I am so glad I read your poems, they are amazing! ! Oozing imagination and imagery!
This is a style I always feel comfortable with; where the voice of the poem seems to take on an additional personality, somewhere out of time; and the self is super present and super conscious of everything, and kind of balances above it all like a benediction. Really enjoyed this.
beautiful poem for a beautiful queen from a beautiful poet luwi
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Haha nice poem....sweet Not the ending I thought It would be.10s