Behind Her Eyes Poem by Susan Williams

Behind Her Eyes

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Behind her eyes
do you see
a deep blue good-bye
or is it
just a trick of light.
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Behind her eyes
do you see
it's Open Season
and maybe just maybe
this is where it all ends.
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Behind his eyes
do you see
fire ants of hate
or is it
just the he she's never known
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Behind his eyes
do you see
a gathering of sharp objects
or is it just
a sickness of shadows
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Behind the closed door
do you see
random acts of war
or are they
just playing with fire.
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Behind closed doors
do you think
they've gone beyond the limits
or is it all
just a test of wills
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Behind her eyes
...........................Behind his eyes
Behind closed doors
...........................Behind high walls
is it
is it time
to be afraid
to at last be afraid
that they will end their endless strife
and there'll soon be 412 bones
lurching across the Great Divide
or
worse
is it time
to be afraid
to at long long last be afraid
that caught in a state of siege
they are forever trapped
in their dark paradise lost
in their bitter promised land.
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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~©2017Susan Williams

Tuesday, February 14, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: disaster,dominance,love,sexuality
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Tom Billsborough 15 February 2017

Some relationship seem continually on the edge of destruction with repeated battles of will but somehow survive, though locked in their bitter promised land . That last phrase shows what a fine poet you are, Susan. It is a most fascinating poem and you make it frighteningly real.

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Susan Williams 15 February 2017

Thank you, Tom, you are very kind as well as a perceptive critiquer [spell check doesn't seem to think that is a word but I swear that it is... in either this universe or in an alternative universe... after all, we now have alternative truth.......] Thank you Tom for always spurring me on to write better by your take on what I have done.

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Tom Billsborough 15 February 2017

critiquer is certainly good French! Critique is good English so critiquer (as a person who applies as critique) seems pretty respectable to me. Maybe you should check this at Oxford. If it's not in their list I bet they'd consider it for inclusion. I would anyway!

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Susan Williams 16 February 2017

Tom, oh mighty Critiquer, I wish you were the head of Oxford... I would love to see the list they'd put out then! ! ! ;)

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Annette Aitken 16 February 2017

This is such a strong write and a great read, it gets your head thinking straight away about this, what are they seeing, what are they hidden so many questions, great write Susan.

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Dr Dillip K Swain 07 September 2022

A great poem! I find eneromous pleasure in reading this outstanding poem multiple times!

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Bill Cantrell 07 September 2022

You're poem Is very deep and questions you raise Many times can only be realized after the relationship has started, this is very different from any of your other poems, just goes to show what a wonderful poetess you are, wonderful poem

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Bill Cantrell 07 September 2022

The depth of this poem forces one to force the reader to question what at times can only

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 06 September 2022

A one of a kind poem so beautifully presented.Very moving and deeply poignant. Yes, the eyes can expose an evil heart with wicked intentions.

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 06 September 2022

A powerful, brilliant, perceptive and meaningful poem that focuses on domestic abuse / violence. Liked how it was crafted. It generates one question after another that fuel the mind of a reader to think and delve into the brilliant point of view of the wonderful Poetess.

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