Better Luck Next Time Poem by abhimanyu kumar.s

Better Luck Next Time

Rating: 4.3

A day will come
Will you come that day?
The day far beyond days
A day long like arabian nights.

When will that day come
When will I meet you
Will you meet me?
Or will I meet only day.

I know, that day will come
You may also know that
Will you be possibly pleased
Or will you be probably displaced.

The day will come
When you will search me
You will search
Which you didn't
When I was with you.

Far you will go
Far your promises
That day you will realize
Importance of me
I will wait for such day.

Better Luck Next Time
Saturday, July 2, 2011
Topic(s) of this poem: love
Kendzi Samuel 03 July 2011

Expresses the emotions well, but not well developed.

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Clara Odelia Ciutara 10 July 2011

Nice poem. What a waiting, better luck next time :) Like this poem

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Adam Omar 13 July 2011

the 2nd & 3rd stanzas strike me! ! I like the uncertainty of it bcoz it personifies the human mind when not sure about a fellow human being's choice esp. a girl which in my opinion is being realistic, not pessimistic.

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maka (kat) albarn 13 July 2011

Nice poem. I like how u are being realistic and how much emotion u put in this poem. Keep it up. I rate it 10 out of 10

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Bonnie Lundgren 20 July 2011

Interesting. Not good enough to be a classic, but a decent poem with honesty and nothing offensive about it. Is this written from experience, maybe?

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Panmelys Panmelys 26 March 2015

Love, which feels bitter that it didn't find in the other, sharing same deep feelings, and hopes (perhaps) ? to meet it again. I would not rate it as well developed, but think with some more thought it cud upgrade its line theme. More important is to keep going, read all the ancients, and study poetic tedhniques, at least in order to have something to disagree with. Keep it up, it's always a painful experience, but you'll find another, I'm sure. Panmelys

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Raghvendra K 28 December 2011

A nice poem written by a person who really knows what is the importance of a relationship..! ! ! ! !

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Raghvendra K 21 December 2011

Its a poem written by a person who really has a lot of fell for the one whom he misses

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grame peele 17 November 2011

better luck is a word which seeks something and here i find the love and apart game on field

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Richard Jarboe 12 November 2011

hopefully I'll see you on that day. Good work.

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