Bored Poem by Kelvin Owusu

Bored

Rating: 2.8


Take flight mid flight
the sunlight, so bright
stomach growling, can't get up
legs, long gone to sleep
one in the afternoon
it feels like midnight
my mind, clouds

Images of a white dress, black tux
balloons pop, cake, stripper pops out
the alter, me looking, yeah I look sexy
the bride looks damn, words can't describe
perfection closes to description
best man checking out the bridesmaids
his girl, death stare.
Reality kicks in, wow what in the gods name
since when, huh, I don't want to get, what?
weddings? its official. I'm bored.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Alexander Coppedge 10 July 2013

You have great elements in your art You need to bring out th beauty in each line to convey its magic

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Elizabeth Padillo Olesen 18 August 2012

Dear Kelvin, thanks for asking me to comment. I find this an entertaining poem, you are able to define the meaning of boredom through the list of images in daily life. Great. But what about dividing this poem into three verses and see how the clear cut form and structure of your poem will show. For me, it is more for the readers to be guided by a flow and structure of lines. It is much easier. Possessive case with apostrophy s. Look when you say, in God's name.

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