Bri's Before And Now.. [personal; Short; Child To Adult; Response To Poem By Valsa George] Poem by Bri Edwards

Bri's Before And Now.. [personal; Short; Child To Adult; Response To Poem By Valsa George]

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As a boy I was happy and spoiled;
my Mom washed all the clothes I soiled.
Perhaps I did not KNOW I was happy,
BUT I think I rarely ever felt crappy.

I could play games with my friend.
It's too bad childhood has to end.
Then it's bills and chores for sure;
for growing up, there's no real cure.

And NOT all grownups are successful,
as life can be HARSH, and STRESSFUL.
But I've been lucky, I must say, and....
at night sleep comes when I....hit the hay.

Tuesday, January 20, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: life
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
when i commented on PH member Valsa George's fine poem, 'Before and Now' i left her this poem (which i've slightly edited before submitting for membership reading) (no, there was nothing 'bad' in it before; i just tweaked it a bit to make it a little bit better [maybe]) .
thanks, Valsa, for the inspiration, AND for suggesting that i submit it. for some odd reason, i had not only not submitted it, but i had FORGOTTEN that i'd written it! ! ! ! can you spell s-e-n-i-l-i-t-y? actually i remembered it when i saw it on her poem's page.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Savita Tyagi 25 January 2015

Sleep comes when I hit the hay. Can't get better than that.

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Valsa George 21 January 2015

Thank you Bri..... I am happy that my poem Before and Now turned out to be the inspiration for writing this lovely poem..... You are able' to sleep as soon as you hit the hay' because you are still a kid.... excessively fond of ice creams and sweetmeats! Or is it because you have entered 'second childhood'..... I wonder?

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Dr Pintu Mahakul 20 January 2015

Playing game with friends and memorising successful days really make this poem special to read. Wonderful poem shared.

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Chuy Amante 20 January 2015

Now old boy your youth is waning time for you to do some insaning make sure to get your morning paper in your boxers or don't even drape her and for the noontime mail that comes go and get it in bare buns

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