Broken Musician Poem by JR Cuyam

Broken Musician

Rating: 4.3


The night is cold and the sky is empty
Motionless, all around me is dreary
Couldn't make a sound with my piano
Its keys, like my heart, are broken too
Took my guitar, my favorite instrument
To sing my lungs out with tears of sentiment
But it's wretched and useless like the piano
Its strings, like my heart, are broken too
You came to me with a resurrecting melody
That breathed a warble into my cold heart
Like a music that musicians would love to play
You're astonishing, you're a breathtaking art
Everyday with you was like a concert
Sonorous and happy- -lost in your comfort
But just like music and songs, the have beginning and ending
You waived your unmellifluous goodbye and left lamed- I'm dying
Now lonely and deafened by the sound of deformity
Unable to piece together every broken part of me

Wednesday, March 30, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: broken,music
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Rajnish Manga 14 April 2016

Well nuanced portrayal of a lover's broken heart which simply refuses to play on any musical instruments which earlier used to produce mellifluous notes. Thanks for sharing, Cuyam. Couldn't make a sound with my piano Its keys, like my heart, are broken too Unable to piece together every broken part of me

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Jesus Diaz Llorico 31 March 2016

A beautiful write, comparing love to music. Truly a marvelous piece of poetry.rated 10+

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Douglas Scotney 31 March 2016

quite good Jr.. Great ideas. The form could be bettered eg 'Unable to piece...'

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Lynn Petty 31 March 2016

Wow! ! Just beautiful! ! A lost love, which is uplifting at its beginning but, deflating at its departure. Beautifully done and so lamentable. Keep on writing the world needs you. Add more and more to your list of poems as each one will supersede the previous one. Thank you for bringing your poems to my attention. Lynn W. Petty.

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Lorraine Colon 31 March 2016

I believe love is a symphony that plays in us. The deeper our love, the more glorious and amplified it becomes. When love departs, the music stops and the silence becomes deafening. Your poem explains this so well. When the heart is broken, so are all the instruments. The music can no longer play. The analogies you use are very effective - the keys of the piano, and the strings of the guitar, like your heart, were also broken, and can no longer produce the music. Very well written.

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Ibtissam Ibrahim 31 August 2023

that's good poem .. congratulation

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Bharati Nayak 10 August 2020

The night is cold and the sky is empty Motionless, all around me is dreary Couldn't make a sound with my piano Its keys, like my heart, are broken too Took my guitar, my favorite instrument- - - The sadness of a broken heart has been expressed profoundly in this touching write.

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Michael Walker 08 August 2019

A lost love, of which you write, can be quite devastating and hard to endure. A very emotional poem, which succeeds through sincerity and the brilliant extended metaphor of music.

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Pamela Sinicrope 01 January 2017

Go together so well. You did a nice job of evoking the mood with your image and then the figurative musical language flowed so well...like a great melancholy ballad. Nice Job. Thanks for sharing.

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Richard Wlodarski 08 December 2016

You have captured the essence of heart break in a most profound and prolific manner. This Is Poetry! And would make a great song! Keep up the great work!

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