Sparrows in my mind
Scratching for ort
Stirring a host
Crowding in my bowels
Have the fireflies flown?
From a grumbling cavern
They fly up to
My uptight gullet
Pushing up bile
Tamped down
By peristalsis
Aach, what a sting!
But, I wanted to sing
This terse poem was well written and expressed, Eddie. In fact, it remined me of a famous opera tenor who cancelled an appearance in Philadelphia a few years ago because he had an upset stomach and an inflamed esophagus. Stomach and gastro-intestinal disorders can often be debilitating, despite the many over-the-counter remedies for them. Though your words painted an uncomfortable picture in this poem, it was a good one! Carl.
Another refreshing write form you Eddie different and a pleasure to read, Lynda xx 10
A very informative write I could just picture it, although I would have never thought about it. A good write. LOL I enjoyed it Thamks
sir I really enjoyed this poem, a very original and interesting piece of work...10
I digested it well but it was short. Anyway, t'was great, it helps my brain to exercise today.I need it.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
very nice lines enjoyed them.