Valerie Dohren

Gold Star - 7,452 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Can You See - Poem by Valerie Dohren

Can you hear a gentle breath
Through fields of golden corn

Can you hear the willow shed
Her tears of dew at dawn

Can you hear a baby cry
A baby yet unborn


Shall you touch a drifting cloud
Floating `cross the skies

To swiftly touch the dancing flames
Reflected in your eyes

And so to touch a ray of light
As o`er the land it flies


And shall you speak of distant dreams
And of life`s turning wheels

Shall you speak of that great love
The veil of death conceals

Shall you speak of thine own self
That truth alone reveals


Where hangs the perfume of a rose
Before it comes to bloom

And where the fragrance of the night
Your spirit to consume

Should e`er the scent of beauty fade
Then will we sleep too soon


Can you see the smallest star
Refulgent in the night

Can you see a butterfly
Flash by you, fast in flight

Can you see the spark of truth
Behold glorious light


Comments about Can You See by Valerie Dohren

  • Patricia Northall (3/5/2014 2:46:00 PM)

    Beautifully, and sensitively written Valerie, I felt quite emotional
    reading it... Very deep thinking but so true of the simple beauty
    of life.
    Pat Northall
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  • (5/15/2013 10:37:00 PM)

    We spend too much time caught up in our supperficial realty, that we miss these more important matters of life, that you have so eloquently outlined here, open our Real-Eyes...... (Report)Reply

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  • Valsa George (2/3/2013 9:58:00 PM)

    Valerie, to what wondrous experiences, you take us along! This is a gem of a write! ! (Report)Reply

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  • Stevie Taite (12/6/2012 4:04:00 PM)

    I have not seen this triplet type structure, taking use through each of our senses! Like how it reads/ works. A well thought out, clever poem, (and 'can you smell' would not have worked lol) (Report)Reply

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  • (10/18/2012 3:13:00 PM)

    This is a really lovely poem. (Report)Reply

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  • Suvro Bhattacharya (9/10/2012 10:38:00 AM)

    WOW! What a wonderful sweet poem it is!
    I enjoy thoroughly!
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  • Captain Cur (5/18/2012 2:59:00 PM)

    The metaphors were well worked with an eerie silence behind them
    which added to the effect and message of this poem. Well done.
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  • (4/29/2012 1:18:00 PM)

    The sweet, nearly magical delicacy of your wording is a joy to behold-so good (Report)Reply

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  • Martin O'Neill (3/2/2012 1:02:00 PM)

    I am really enjoying your work. This is another fine piece. (Report)Reply

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  • (2/26/2012 4:50:00 PM)

    wow.... i think that sums it all... (Report)Reply

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  • Peter Strugnell (2/10/2012 2:26:00 PM)

    keep making those sparks! (Report)Reply

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  • (2/5/2012 3:14:00 PM)

    images of augmented reality; you relate them and puzzle is complete...beautiful work done! ! ! (Report)Reply

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  • (2/5/2012 9:54:00 AM)

    A really great poem, like it. A great write.
    May i invite you to read my new poem called,
    Angels Of Peace.
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Poem Submitted: Sunday, February 5, 2012



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