Love Hurts Poems: 14 / 500

Clear Water

Rating: 4.8

into clear water.
The light
hurts my eyes,
the warmth
protects me
from myself.

I see your hand
in the water.
An open hand,
waiting for me
to grab it,
to grab life,
to grab fear,
to embrace you.

The shore
can no longer be seen.
I float
into your arms.

Allemagne Roßmann 07 October 2009

to grab it, to grab life, to grab fear, to embrace you. sounds like an angel wow...

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Adeline Foster 02 June 2009

Wonderfully descriptive poem enhanced by its brevity. Truly enjoyed it. Adeline

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A great visual poem, I can see the scene, feel the water.

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Penny Hemans 12 November 2007

a truly visual poem, effective and bringing us into the water with you :)) a poem of freedom and of trust; lovely thanks Pia, Love Penny xxx

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Yashar rezaeipour 11 October 2007

this is the ultimate desire for human to have a clear hand waiting for him!

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R.benjamin Abate 29 April 2013

This is fantastic. I feel like it's all happening to me. -ralph

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Anil Kumar Panda 12 July 2011

a touching ink.liked the flow and wording and emotion involved.

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Steven Silent Wolf 22 November 2009

Compelling! Very like my own - 'a note.'

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Merna Ibrahim 26 October 2009

Great poem! ! ....++10++ Thanks a lot for your comment...Merna

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Sathyanarayana M V S 10 October 2009

Your style is great.In simple language you are expressing a lot of theme; and your theme are very deeply philosophical.

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