Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black

Gold Star - 14,357 Points (July 12,1952 / New York City)

Cupid's Rainbow - Poem by Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black

Leaving rainbows in my sleep
Only vision softly creeps
Venus slain to rise again
To share the light and quell the pain

Stardust shimmers like the past
Prisms shattered or everlast
Evasive whispers in my heart
Carves the image my soul imparts

Voices chime in dreams of glass
The future in the hour cast
Immortal as time's frailty
Unending with mortality

And in the dust the diamond makes
Within my heart reverie wakes
Alone you haunt, your essence chase
With the Sun the Moon is chaste

In the mind illusions dwell
Only the heart will clearly tell
Better my love to you before
Glows the morrow even more.

Comments about Cupid's Rainbow by Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black

  • John Knight (9/12/2009 5:33:00 PM)

    Hi Lorraine - A nicely constructed poem! So many poems on PH lack Form - Metre - Rhyme so it is lovely to find a poem that has all three. A lovely subject (that we can all relate to) and five balanced quatrains. You maintain the a a b b pattern of rhyme throughout but you are not 'rhyme led' and include some delicate 'half rhymes' glass - cast and internal rhymes which help the flow (Venus slain to rise again) . The metre is good throughout. I believe one criterion of a good poem is its recitability - yours is excellent. Do you agree that Poetry is meant not only to be read but also recited - Poetry Readings are very cathartic! I love your poem because it is both positive and optimistic - so many of the posted poems are POESIE NOIRE! Your similes are wonderful - Rianbows - Venus - Stardust - Prisms - Diamonds - Sun & Moon - etc. The last two lines are beautiful 'Better my love to you before - Glows the morrow even more'. I have been married 51 years so I can empathise. I must score it MAX - Yours in poetry - John (Report) Reply

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  • Cj Heck (8/5/2009 8:33:00 PM)

    What a joy your work is... soft, flowing, and so real.
    Warmest regards,
    CJ Heck
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  • Myrtle Thomas (2/19/2009 5:36:00 PM)

    I read your biography it was very inspiring.I love the rainbow poem I wish I could do that.I have only been writing for a few months but I truly love it. A big 10 for you. (Report) Reply

  • (1/25/2009 9:59:00 PM)

    Deep and captivating......10 (Report) Reply

  • Ashraful Musaddeq (10/26/2008 10:10:00 PM)

    Lovely poem.
    Love it.
    10 for it.
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  • (10/24/2008 10:18:00 AM)

    loved this one............good write (Report) Reply

  • (10/10/2008 11:47:00 AM)

    Lovely dreamy sounds in this! I'm not a fan of rhyme unless it has reason and here it works. This is the first of your poems that I've read and I shall come back for more. (Report) Reply

  • Sathyanarayana M V S (10/9/2008 7:36:00 AM)

    Mild, mellowed with so many beautiful rhymes, similies and metaphors...a great composition..............10 (Report) Reply

  • (10/8/2008 11:03:00 PM)

    I find your poems to be inspiring and I know that I will learn so much from reading them. Thank you! 10+++ (Report) Reply

  • Sarwar Chowdhury (10/8/2008 2:06:00 PM)

    fine composition with nice ryhm/rythm......10+ (Report) Reply

  • (10/7/2008 7:11:00 PM)

    nice 10 from me..... (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, October 7, 2008

Poem Edited: Sunday, July 31, 2011

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