Leaving rainbows in my sleep
Only vision softly creeps
Venus slain to rise again
To share the light and quell the pain
Stardust shimmers like the past
Prisms shattered or everlast
Evasive whispers in my heart
Carves the image my soul imparts
Voices chime in dreams of glass
The future in the hour cast
Immortal as time's frailty
Unending with mortality
And in the dust the diamond makes
Within my heart reverie wakes
Alone you haunt, your essence chase
With the Sun the Moon is chaste
In the mind illusions dwell
Only the heart will clearly tell
Better my love to you before
Glows the morrow even more.
I find your poems to be inspiring and I know that I will learn so much from reading them. Thank you! 10+++
Mild, mellowed with so many beautiful rhymes, similies and metaphors...a great composition..............10
Lovely dreamy sounds in this! I'm not a fan of rhyme unless it has reason and here it works. This is the first of your poems that I've read and I shall come back for more.
Hi Lorraine - A nicely constructed poem! So many poems on PH lack Form - Metre - Rhyme so it is lovely to find a poem that has all three. A lovely subject (that we can all relate to) and five balanced quatrains. You maintain the a a b b pattern of rhyme throughout but you are not 'rhyme led' and include some delicate 'half rhymes' glass - cast and internal rhymes which help the flow (Venus slain to rise again) . The metre is good throughout. I believe one criterion of a good poem is its recitability - yours is excellent. Do you agree that Poetry is meant not only to be read but also recited - Poetry Readings are very cathartic! I love your poem because it is both positive and optimistic - so many of the posted poems are POESIE NOIRE! Your similes are wonderful - Rianbows - Venus - Stardust - Prisms - Diamonds - Sun & Moon - etc. The last two lines are beautiful 'Better my love to you before - Glows the morrow even more'. I have been married 51 years so I can empathise. I must score it MAX - Yours in poetry - John
What a joy your work is... soft, flowing, and so real. Warmest regards, CJ Heck
I read your biography it was very inspiring.I love the rainbow poem I wish I could do that.I have only been writing for a few months but I truly love it. A big 10 for you.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
nice 10 from me.....