Dear Father Poem by merna ibrahim

Fine poem................................

Shivering and Sad. a sincere poem. hope your father get to Heaven GOD bless you/

this a very very good poem and ur deep feelings are really great god bless you, , , , with love

After you have gone. unfortunately, I understood you now, I really do. I miss your shouting I miss your smiling I need you....but i wish I would see you in heaven I hope you are in heaven...................it is really a strong wish from daughter and tribute to a father who did so much for the family... lovley poem and i apriciaqte it so much....10 read mine papa do u know.......papa u too...... along with o, mother

N that has lead me to depression n suicide n cutting

The poem expresses your deep attachment with your father. You have successfully painted the whole situation. Rich in imagery and style. Nice write.

Nice sentiment but rhyming alone doesn't make a poem. Some personal concrete images would have made you poem about your father far stronger in many ways. So real personal memories like what he like to eat, how he dressed, how he said goodnight to you as a child. How he smiled anything of this sort would have made your father far more real than the abstracts that you presented in the poem. Think about what the reader doesn't know and realize that the reader wants that person stuff that makes things real. Stuff that draws a real picture in their head. A poet needs to draw the reader in and maintain them. This what makes the difference between a great poem and a simple rhyme. You should read Dylan Thomas' poem After the Funeral (In memory of Ann Jones) which deals with the death of someone he cared for very much. You will notice he uses the intimate images and describes the funeral in detailed words that make us feel the the burial and the the reception room after the funeral. We end up with a real picture of poor Ann Jones. Even the stuffed fox in her room and how death is even in the unwatered fern in her house. They are real images and symbols that leave the reader with real feelings about Ann Jones. We know her somewhat after reading the poem. A poet friend// RH Peat

Feeling Poetry on Papa …down the memory lane vivid ] I trust like all departed parents where may be they're shower love to kids unceasingly … thanks for sharing Hon’ble Poet Merna Regards Ms. Nivedita UK 10/10

this was so sad almost made me cry great job : ')

the longing for a father is written just the way it should be here.... nice poem... do you know Mr. Omar Ibrahim?