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Do Not Resuscitate

Rating: 5.0

Saturated in morphine
breathing like a hurt animal
maybe somewhere deep down
at the bottom of the mineshaft
a little light was flickering.
We spoke to her, sometimes loudly,
We held her hand and felt its warmth
We stroked her hair.

We expected the end in hours or a day,

More morphine and more wild animal rasping
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Scarlett Treat 01 July 2006

This, Michael, is an extremely honest look at the two participants of death - the one dying and the one left behind. Having been there, I know sometimes that the only way we can cope with death is to laugh out loud! And then we feel guilty for laughing...but if we are lucky, the one dying would know - and understand. Scarlett

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Wanda Swim Strunk 30 November 2005

It's wierd experiencing someone passing. I watched my mother in law pass with quiet calm only a death rattle at the very end. I saw her younger brother pass 2 weeks ago from the same cancer screaming in pain then quietly no sound just shallow breathing at the end. Death has it's own signature.

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Keiah Delu 27 November 2005

Wow, this poem was very emotional to me and the details were on point, you kept me interested, not one boring sentence. Well done!

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You made me 'remember'. Very effective. As usual - fabulous.

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Stephen Parnell 01 September 2005

Good poem! The title and the mineshaft metaphor were particularly intriguing. Regards, Stephen Parnell

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Michael Philips 01 September 2005

Thanks John, you were right. I took you suggestion.

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John Kay 01 September 2005

Michael...this is a fine poem. It's a gift from the heart. It gets to the pain and stays with it. My only suggestion is to cut the line 'in the suspended logic of hope.' It is too abstract and it tries to explain something about the poem. It took me away from the raw, sensitive feelings and the location in the poem. That's my two cents.

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Raynette Eitel 01 September 2005

The pain here is palpable. Hard to read. But there truly is laughter at unexpected times, and yes I believe sometimes those hard in life are also unwilling to let death take them. This is a fine poem, Michael. Raynette

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Uriah Hamilton 01 September 2005

there's much sadness in the poem but there is also dignity and victory.

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Shelley B. Keats 01 September 2005

THe subject of the poem is one thing- but the poem itself has life! Well done!

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