David DeSantis

Rookie (01/29/85 / Utica, NY)

Ergonomic Split - Poem by David DeSantis

She’s like
elevating elevator,
I’m a
Finger licking
Fiddle player
Why don’t
You blow
my whistle
be my savior,
I can burn
In your sauna later.
I’m a
Fish diving
And your
Pole stroke of
If you play
With my
I’ll give you
Off white

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Comments about Ergonomic Split by David DeSantis

  • (4/29/2008 3:00:00 AM)

    Wonderful new metaphors - aren`t they? - 'Elevator elevating', 'ergonomic', they have been just waiting to become poetry. I like your style! (Report) Reply

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  • (4/28/2008 3:33:00 AM)

    Ooh la la! ! ! Love it, very punchy, to the point, fun poem! ! ! HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

  • (4/25/2008 2:35:00 PM)

    .. but you left out the escalator
    that I slide down via A3 paper
    ... I know an office in a 'scraper
    meet you there at half past later
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  • (4/22/2008 7:57:00 AM)

    I'm laughing out loud in a library - just about as inappropriate as your poem I would say! Charmingly cheeky, particularly the off-white paper. Come on Yuri, just a little extension of the imagination... (Report) Reply

  • (4/19/2008 5:36:00 PM)

    I found this piece quite sensual and amusing, is the elevator a metaphor for your bodily rise.?
    I'm never disapointed when I read your work thanks Nik
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  • Yuri Duraan (4/17/2008 2:33:00 PM)

    Well, the elevator can only go up from here! Very good, my friend, , different again than your others... I like your versatility- and there is tongue-in-the-cheek humour there as well.... what's up with the off-white paper? (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2008 12:30:00 PM)

    the ergonomics are beautifully designed....your mechanics will surely force your elevator...in poetics as well.. interesting and spontaneous.. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, April 17, 2008

Poem Edited: Thursday, April 17, 2008

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