Ex- Girlfriends

Rating: 3.2
Uncertain drops
Of anguish
Filter through the night
While waste water
Remove any light
As California raisins
Dance to the sight
Of mixed
Metamorphic kites.

Every little symptom
Begins with your bite
While every diagnosis
Is a problematic height
And every trapped memory
Is another kind of blight,
Alleviated neurons
And sycophantic rites.

I'm caught up in a struggle
Of allegoric might
Stuck between an angle
A catatonic plight
A half finished puzzle
To share for your delight
In certainty only
Can wrong
make it right.

Copyright (c) David DeSantis
Monday, May 5, 2008
Topic(s) of this poem: break up
Liz Thaugally 06 September 2009
Hi David, dropped by and re-read some of my favourite poems on here including this one.10/10. Although I belive we could also relate this to ex-boyfriends too! new poems on my own website, please do have a look when you have time! Love, Lizelah. www.lizelah.co.uk
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R H 17 May 2008
From the 'uncertain drops of anguish', the words in this poem don't just flow, they cascade to expose a surge of thoughts and images that ultimately beguile. The blending of shapes, colours and confusion give this poem an abstract quality that is both vbrant and lasting. justine.
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Greenwolfe 1962 13 May 2008
This is a very fine poem and its worthy of the writer. GW62
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LOVEFOOL Aka 09 May 2008
A really good intense read beautifully written as allways Thanks Nik
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~ Jon London ~ 06 May 2008
Ahh, bro...the very creatures that can make or break a man, I'm really not the one that can comment to be honest..as I'm still lost in this world waiting to be saved..but I love your magical way with expression...genius mate.. Stay strong Jon
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That is actually a seriously clever piece. (Try having ex boyfriends though and then think yourself lucky. :)) t x
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Rani Turton 06 May 2008
My kind of poem! I enjoyed it immensely. Thanks David.
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Onelia Avelar 06 May 2008
Yeay! This is the new poem? I like it very much: Uncertain drops / Of anguish / Filter through the night / While waste water / Droplets / Remove any light... Every new poem is better and better. I like the lightness of the metre and of the style of this one.
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This is superb! Brilliant cadence to it. HG: -) xx
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Ivor Hogg 05 May 2008
confusion reigns supreme in the wee small hours looking back over what could have been but is not
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