Far Far... Poem by Saeid Hadavand

Far Far...

Rating: 5.0

Far Far spaces
a tiny lost bird...
is looking for traces

Far Far distances
there is the man...
the man who fights the cases

Far Far romances
I feel the love...
and after that, the painless

Far Far and kindness
making some hot...
so kindly kisses

Far Far graces
watchin the moon...
the moonly faces

Far Far so races
my life is like a chess game
my king is the matest

Saadat Tahir 23 April 2009

hi there you started very well here immeditaerly caught my attention but down the middle lost the thread and wraped it up as best as possible under such circumstances its best to deliver a shoryter sharper message and not force youself or your pen this is not a discouragement... just my views..poetry is tooo vast a canvas for us to limit cheers

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Anna jonson 23 April 2009

great poem that has a very great rhythm..good job....

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Eyan Desir 23 April 2009

Good write dear Poet

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Mel Vincent Basconcillo 26 April 2009

You are similar to Omar Khayyam! truly poetic and expressive! amazing poem!

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C. P. Sharma 26 April 2009

Awesome poem. Loved it. CP

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Nima Bazgir 02 January 2010

life's like a chess game but i have a no name! .. the king with the broken heart... he is not the king... she is the queen... -- for my best friend. with the best wishes... be careful of your self my heart.

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Ashraful Musaddeq 19 May 2009

Repetation of Far Far has added melody to this poem. It is a lovey poem.

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I really like the concept of your poem and you have been very philosophical in your approach to it. You have used the repetition of Far Far really well. Good work. Top marks Karin Anderson

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Elaine Oxamendi Vicet 26 April 2009

Interesting write. So long as you donn't get 'check mate' life is taken in strides. Good write.

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Bob Blackwell 26 April 2009

An interesting poem, keep writing.

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