Eyan Desir

Rookie - 15 Points (caribbean)

... Font Color= Blue Love Versus Hate.... (Final Count Down) - Poem by Eyan Desir


Once the vine from above
Mixed with the seeds of love
Desires turned to envy
Envy spat jealousy
Whiter than light
Turned dark as night
Foolish humans! beware
My anger fills lakes
Hearts, I must break
Blood fills my plate
Your life is at stake
Fool! I'm called hate.

Virtuous like a lamb
Brighter than light
sadness will disapear
Laughter will be near
Loneliness will be warm
Hearts will be one
Softer than a feather
Sweet and tender
Innocent like a dove
Are the wings of love.

The sperms of Satan
Fuel with his rage
Versus the branch of God
Wrapped in human lives
Only the sands of time
Tell who wins our heart?


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Comments about ... Font Color= Blue Love Versus Hate.... (Final Count Down) by Eyan Desir

  • (1/15/2010 5:06:00 PM)


    This is one of the best poems I have ever read. (Report) Reply

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  • Harold K Schreiberg (1/10/2010 4:07:00 AM)


    The images in these verses are strong, just like the subjects they depict!
    Nice poem.
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  • (12/28/2009 9:14:00 AM)


    Eyan, this is an outstanding poem, yeah, love versus hate is a very good topic on poetry. nice... (Report) Reply

  • (12/23/2009 2:06:00 PM)


    This was an amazing poem...I absolutely loved it. The way you described love and hate...awesome. (Report) Reply

  • (12/23/2009 10:36:00 AM)


    Excellent work. It flow nicely and deserve no less than->> 10 (Report) Reply

  • yellowbell alamanda (12/23/2009 12:14:00 AM)


    wow nice! i felt every verses... but hope the love always reign.
    have a wonderful yuletide season...
    bring out the love.
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  • (12/22/2009 4:45:00 PM)


    excellent simile

    Innocent like a dove
    Are the wings of love.


    excellent abstract poem

    10++++++++++
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  • Craig Anderson (12/21/2009 6:52:00 AM)


    I found this poem different everytime I read it four times to be precise. I didn't find repetition, quite the opposite in fact an old piece for the present time. Regards. Craig. (Report) Reply

  • (12/20/2009 12:47:00 PM)


    this is absolutely amazing. i haven't read something this good in a long time. you don't have to write modernly for the modern to understand you. but the words you use make it seem like an ancient prophecy being uncovered and shown to the world. a warning to the innocent from a man called hate.10! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • (12/19/2009 10:44:00 PM)


    sir. you just made sperm a bad thing. :) .
    The poem is good.
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  • (12/19/2009 9:41:00 PM)


    I think the repetition is much like a stripping away.
    The peeling away from that which had one time appealed.
    Interesting poem none the lest. I see nothing festive about it.
    Nor a completion of the act of removal either.
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  • (12/19/2009 10:51:00 AM)


    Eighteen comments is enough. I never got eighteen comments. (Report) Reply

  • (12/19/2009 6:35:00 AM)


    Eyan, you cover all the bases of love and hate in your poem. I enjoyed the write and look forward to more great writing from you. Keep up the good work. Your Friend Lynn (Report) Reply

  • (12/19/2009 1:50:00 AM)


    Jocund and thro’ and thro’ the heart …enjoyed…giving highest marks ten..
    Ms. Nivedita
    UK
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  • (12/19/2009 1:39:00 AM)


    you bring in your poem the Christmas message bright in its true sense in your original style...good work...10 (Report) Reply

  • (12/18/2009 11:13:00 PM)


    I like the personification; how love becomes hates enemy and not its opposite and how hate is depicted as frustration and agony more than unwillingness. (Report) Reply

  • (12/18/2009 10:36:00 PM)


    great poem very interesting (Report) Reply

  • (12/18/2009 9:46:00 PM)


    Nice one. (: Very enjoyable. (Report) Reply

  • John Knight (12/18/2009 2:59:00 PM)


    Hi Eyan - The battle of 'Good v Evil' is perrennial. It is a Friut of the Spirit LOVE combatting a Work of the Flesh HATE. This is a daily battle in every human psyche. Every Human has FREE WILL - We can let God's Holy Spirit of LOVE subjugate HATRED and LOVE can reign in our Hearts. V 1 Describes HATE and V 2 describes LOVE. V 3 We can't blame the Environment or Satan we can (with God's assistance) be 'Masters of our own Destiny' and chose LOVE rather than HATE. Nicely structured and worded poem. Your in Poetry - JOHN. (Report) Reply

  • (12/18/2009 2:15:00 PM)


    one word WOW lol really powerful words and strongly put! excellent! : D (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, December 16, 2009

Poem Edited: Tuesday, March 9, 2010


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