Eyan Desir

Rookie - 66 Points (caribbean)

* Becoming The Best.....(Inspirational)

Poem by Eyan Desir



When divine order
Wraps gifts in mortals hands
Executing with excellence
Becomes an easy task

Where the fires burn
The oil of ambition
Intensifies its heat

Where perseverance leaks
Practicing will mould
Sweat into sucess

Obsessions to win
Crushes! the opposition
Hard work builds champions

With the touch of an angel
Get ready, steady go!
To behold the process....

Of becoming the best.


Copyright © ®2009, Eyan desir. All rights
Nov 4th 2009..


Comments about * Becoming The Best.....(Inspirational) by Eyan Desir

  • Whispering Rose (4/14/2010 10:39:00 AM)

    simply inspiring... thank you for sharing(Report)Reply

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  • Janell Cressman (3/14/2010 6:47:00 PM)

    this is the stuff you need to be righting, this is my most favoriote poem you have ever written! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! This is the best poem i have read in a long time! ! ! ! ! (10 and way more! ! !)(Report)Reply

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  • Romeo Della ValleRomeo Della Valle (3/14/2010 9:44:00 AM)

    Eyan, this is a living proof of excellency, well penned like the rest of your poems, keep it up, WISDOM is not a priviledge, it is a gift given to us by GOOD to be share with the rest of the world....Love and Peace,10++++(Report)Reply

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  • Nic Leisure (11/24/2009 1:02:00 PM)

    great poem injoyed reading it....9(Report)Reply

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  • Moonbee CanadyMoonbee Canady (11/22/2009 1:08:00 AM)

    Nice Work of Words... I Especially Like The First Stanza... MoonBee(Report)Reply

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  • Becky Laprarie (11/21/2009 2:32:00 AM)

    Hello I read a few of your poems about 4-I really like this one the best-you have a way about you in your writing that I have never felt in reading others work-keep up the good work-

    Your poems speak about pain and loss in love-you have a lot of passion-keep writing-(Report)Reply

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  • Keith Mclennon (11/20/2009 11:18:00 PM)

    excellent spoken like a true poet(Report)Reply

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  • Fergus Condron (11/20/2009 7:56:00 AM)

    Hi Eyan,

    I like this, its buzzy.......

    Good choice of words,

    Gave you a 6......

    Ferg(Report)Reply

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  • Sivashanmugam ShanmugamSivashanmugam Shanmugam (11/19/2009 9:00:00 PM)

    HI

    Best inspirational poem.
    Will motivatethe youngers
    To become the first in life

    Nice Desir(Report)Reply

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  • g black black (11/19/2009 8:11:00 PM)

    kepp going with your good job
    love the poem
    especially when i started to read at the begging i couldnt stop reading, , what a beautifull poem(Report)Reply

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  • Alien Zoo (11/19/2009 8:05:00 PM)

    Where the fires burn
    The oil of ambition
    Intensifies its heat

    Nice(Report)Reply

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  • Marieta MaglasMarieta Maglas (11/19/2009 1:58:00 PM)

    Hard work builds champions


    wonderful abstract poem

    10++++++++++(Report)Reply

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  • Fay SlimmFay Slimm (11/19/2009 12:07:00 PM)

    This must surely be inspirational - - it is dripping with first class poetry - - well written from first to last line.....10/10 from Fay.(Report)Reply

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  • Almedia Knight-Oliver (11/19/2009 9:48:00 AM)

    As your poem states, it takes ambition, perseverance, and hard work to 'Become the Best' in arousing one's mind, by divine guidance [if ones desire] or self induced or encouragement from others, the outcome is the same. a good write and a 10(Report)Reply

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  • Pitilosi Mdala (11/19/2009 4:38:00 AM)

    you're already the best, you know wa? you're strong enough to crush the opposition(Report)Reply

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  • Charmaine Sinclair (11/18/2009 6:25:00 PM)

    inspirational is not my thing, but interesting descriptions.(Report)Reply

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  • Halana Williams (11/18/2009 2:40:00 PM)

    This poem is so beautiful =] i really enjoyed reading this =](Report)Reply

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  • Carol Gall (11/18/2009 8:48:00 AM)

    very inspirational and great write 10(Report)Reply

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  • Rajaram RamachandranRajaram Ramachandran (11/16/2009 6:36:00 PM)

    The tips given to become the best will be very useful to the readers.(Report)Reply

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  • Karin Anderson (sorry can't vote or comment) . (11/11/2009 6:56:00 AM)

    Now this is really excellent and I love 'the touch of an angel' as it touched my heart. A great inspirational poem Eyan. 10 love Karin(Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, November 8, 2009

Poem Edited: Wednesday, November 11, 2009