Navod Dilhara


Frustration! - Poem by Navod Dilhara

I used to stroll along in the pedestrian way,
Most at night times for close of the day,
With an anticipation of being so relax and calm,
And also searching for something like balm.

Just an expectation I had,
Not the encountered experiences in life,
And I thought the men outside,
Were frolicsome and rollicking than the men inside.

It opened the pathway towards the gateway,
From which I held my conceptualizations at the doorway,
When I moved in, I descried the highly adorned streets,
With many lamp posts aligned,
And many people with patient minds.

And then I continued walking,
Being tenaciously dogged and anticipations in seeking,
With harshness implied in their eyes,
Burden and unenviable nature in life styles.

I felt like two worlds in persistence,
A line named segregation towards separation,
No doubt, the world exists as two halves,
One with rich making merry in all the times,
And the other with poor having onerous lives by all means.

I say, the man is far from reality,
The modern man thinks, but he doesn't deserve the dignity,
And if one perceived this tragedy,
He would never say that rich were worthy,
In any circumstance for giving them such a melancholy.

With a strong dismay and a frustration inside,
I commenced dwelling upon the happenings outside,
And then I heard the bitter wailing,
Of the women and children in miserable ways,
And a stranger whispered they were sans food for some days.

Then I freezed and marveled in finding,
The martyred martyr with martyrdom,
And many were bundled garnering together,
For finding warmth in resisting the colder,

They weren't shelling out for money,
Or even the status with reverences,
But they had merely one word to say,
'Food' is the one which echoed through out the day.

I had nothing to do with the shrieks of the women,
I had nothing to do with the starvings of the children,
And also with the dire poverty of both men and women,
And then I turned back and moved,
There I decided to return to the highest class I belonged,
Then I passed the separating line,
But guilty and remorse ran through my blood-line.

Topic(s) of this poem: lifestyle


Comments about Frustration! by Navod Dilhara

  • Bri Edwards (11/28/2019 3:39:00 PM)

    4 –

    Overall i like the poem and certainly understand it. With more experience with English, you could be a very fine 'English' poet.

    I feel it is certainly easier & more comfortable at times, ..... and therefore done more often, ....for people to keep
    somewhat separate from those in vastly different economic etc, circumstances.

    bri

    :)

    p.s. i admire those who write in at least 2 languages, which i'm sure you DO! Right?

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  • Bri Edwards (11/28/2019 3:37:00 PM)

    3 –

    THROUGHOUT (one word) i've noticed several of the 'better' Eurasian poets on PH split up some words which i usually would write as one word. For some words it depends on the usage whether i'd make 1 OR 2 words e.g. sometimes and some times.

    last line: i would say " But GUILT and remorse ran through my blood." forget rhyming here!
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  • Bri Edwards (11/28/2019 3:36:00 PM)

    2 –

    stanza 5: maybe use worlds in COEXISTENCE?

    stanza 8: FROZE & COLD

    stanza 9: " shelling out for money" I've heard the phrase " shelling out" but it does not seem to fit here. how about " BEGGING for money" ?
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  • (11/28/2019 3:34:00 PM)

    1 –

    Some Suggestions [in capital letters] to improve the English:

    stanza 1: RELAXED

    stanza 2: MORE frolicsome

    stanza 3: descried: good! [i had to look up the definition** of descry]:
    ** " catch sight of." :)

    stanza 4 is difficult for me to follow, esp.:
    WITH anticipations'? PEOPLE with harshness?
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  • Chinedu Dike (11/24/2019 9:22:00 PM)

    An insightful narrative piece of poetry written with clarity of thought and mind. A witty philosophical reflection. Thanks for sharing, Navod. (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/25/2019 12:12:00 AM)

    Highly admire for commenting, Chinedu. Thank you

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  • Prabir Gayen (12/31/2018 2:23:00 AM)

    Extraordinary expression.....good poem dear poet..... (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/18/2019 1:45:00 PM)

    Thank you! Prabir Gayen

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  • Jazib Kamalvi (10/7/2018 8:49:00 AM)

    Write comment. Imagination, Navod. Read my poem, Love and Iust. Thanks (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/18/2019 1:40:00 PM)

    Thank you for admiring Jazib Kamalvi..

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  • Ravi Sathasivam (6/5/2016 7:44:00 AM)

    Excellent. Craft with deep thoughts. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/18/2019 1:44:00 PM)

    Thank you very much! .Ravi Sathasivam

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  • Kumarmani Mahakul (3/27/2016 3:11:00 PM)

    Searching for something like balm is definitely humorous in this wonderfully expressed rhyme poem. Expectations and experiences in life matter a lot. Man from reality and dignity knows about his own dreams. This is very thought provoking when social issue comes on poverty. Pain makes life very sensitive. Your perception about society is amazing. This is very amazing master piece of work......10 (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(3/29/2016 10:05:00 AM)

    Thank you for the appreciation, Mahakul.

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  • Fabrizio Frosini (3/26/2016 8:01:00 AM)

    thanks for inviting me to read your new poem (a very well penned one, indeed) , Navod. As your write shows, we live in a staggering world; in a highly unequal, egotistical and hypocritical global society, where economic success is seen as the most valued goal, to be achieved by any means.. and this is the world all of us have helped to build.. People of good will who can understand that this kind of society is sustained through an ''inequality system'' - a system which is forcing billion of human beings to live in poverty or with very limited resources - , have to act so to change all this.. simply because it cannot be acceptable to those who believe that everyone should have enough to live their lives with dignity.. Your write is a very good example of POETRY OF WITNESS. Well done! (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/21/2019 1:25:00 PM)

    Your comment is highly admired. Fabrizio

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  • Navod Dilhara (3/24/2016 10:13:00 AM)

    Thank you all for perceiving my poem. I invited you as you all are impeccable indeed. Unless for you all, It' not worth composing poems as there are none to read. (Report)Reply

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  • (3/24/2016 4:53:00 AM)

    The poem carries a different message pertaining to the human problems that is poverty. It is indeed the depressing fact the state of affairs of the majority of people who likes to get the basic food, clothing, and health care. I think the guiltiness and remorse of the people belonging to the higher echelon of society is not the need of the hour but to actively offer the services to humanity as one can that too in established norms and criteria which actually describes as service or real charity to the needy.A great imaginative poem for readers. (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/24/2019 1:04:00 PM)

    I appreciate the comment you made Gangadharan. Thank you very much!

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  • Valsa George (3/24/2016 12:28:00 AM)

    Yes, there is a clear cut border drawn between the halves and the have not. Being a youngster, you are only slowly getting introduced to the gross disparities. It pains you, but now you are not disposed to help them in any way and retreat to your own comfort zone. But as a sensitive soul, I am sure you are not deaf to the wailing of the poor. They cry not for anything else, but just for food. As long as their frustration has touched you, you will be compassionate as you grow up. You have already begun to experience guilt over your indifference. I am sure you have more sensitivity than many boys of your age and you have expressed your thoughts in an impressive way. Except for a few minor errors, your poem is excellent! (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/24/2019 2:06:00 PM)

    Thank you very much Valsa!

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  • Abdulrazak Aralimatti (3/23/2016 11:37:00 PM)

    Verily, you have justified your frustration (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/24/2019 2:08:00 PM)

    Of course I have. Thank you.

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  • Daniel Brick (3/23/2016 6:59:00 PM)

    Navod, This a major poem on a social issue that must solved - the abject poverty of so many innocent people. I see the Speaker as a privileged person who is just beginning to understand that human beings MUST help human beings. At the end of your poem he returns to his sheltered life of affluence but it's obvious to me this new awareness of suffering will not let him ignore their plight. He is at a different kind of gateway - one that will lead him to a moral commitment to help. This is a poem of rescue and redemption: he will rescue the the poor and thereby redeem himself. (Report)Reply

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  • Kim Barney (3/23/2016 6:24:00 PM)

    I can't say anything better than what Kelly, Lawrence and Susan have already said. Read their comments again, take them to heart and apply them, and you will be well on your way! (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/24/2019 2:10:00 PM)

    And I admire your comment. Thank you very much!

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  • Susan Williams (3/23/2016 1:41:00 PM)

    I see what Lawrence Pertiliar is alluding to but I think this absence of heart he sees is more due to the difficulty of expressing yourself in a language other than your native language.. I think you are so very close to using the words you want to use, Navod. If I may advise one thing it would be to choose the simpler word. I do think your emotions were involved for why else would your write this piece. You have important things to say and we need to hear them. I enjoyed the journey in this poem, thank you for showing me a slice of life moment (Report)Reply

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  • Edward Kofi Louis (3/23/2016 11:40:00 AM)

    The rich and the poor! So is life around us today. Nice work. (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/24/2019 2:09:00 PM)

    Thank you very much for commenting!

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  • (3/23/2016 11:37:00 AM)

    Dilhara, your 'Frustration' is well written.
    As if done to impress your intellect. And not
    what is felt from the depth of your heart.
    This approach for some is easier than being honest.
    Your 'Frustration' is successfully described. However...
    what is missing is an absence of your emotional commitment.
    And this may come from not yet acquiring an experienced life to live.
    If your ambitions are to remain a writer/poet, your heart has to become
    part of the process. Your 'FRUSTRATION' reminds me more of
    a journalist activity. From a news reporter point of view. I agree...you are
    a terrific writer. But you can, if you desire, become a greater poet.
    Peace/Blessings, Lawrence
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  • Michael Mcparland (3/23/2016 10:43:00 AM)

    This is a wonderful poem my friend full of deep thought and wonderful expression. A 10 for a very skilled and wonderful writer. (Report)Reply

    Navod Dilhara(11/21/2019 1:23:00 PM)

    I'm glad you mentioned such a thing! Thank you!

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