Rini Shibu

Gold Star - 93,724 Points (1978 / India)

Garden Of Love - Poem by Rini Shibu

Soul in the garden of love
It's like paradise on earth
Twinkling stars wrapped in black carpet
Fresh energetic buds ready to burst
Waiting for the dawn to embrace the warmth of sun
Fragrance of my nectar allured honey bee
came  near and whispered to me
Am lost in your ardent aroma..
You are my life, you are my world..
Softly kissed and tickled  to bloom my heart..
Filled me with beauty and added colors to my life..
You sucked my nectar everyday..
Flew away I couldn't see..
Filled and stored all your hive..
You have stolen all my charm...
lost my elangance
Withered on the ground never you knew
this will be the end when you return..
Does love life give only wound?

Topic(s) of this poem: love

Form: Free Verse


Comments about Garden Of Love by Rini Shibu

  • Aqua Flower (10/10/2018 9:18:00 AM)

    Such a heartfelt poem about love and loss. The ending of the poem is the highlight of the piece. Does love life give only wound? Brilliantly penned. (Report)Reply

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (9/6/2018 10:56:00 AM)

    So lovely poem, , , , , , right 10

    No narrow path
    Thursday,6th September 2018


    it has the capacity
    to make it flowery


    Love has no narrow path
    it makes you breathe,
    freely without the fear of death
    and keeps intact your commitment to the faith

    Hasmukh Amathaal Mehta
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  • Rebecca Navarre (8/29/2018 8:19:00 PM)

    Ever such beautiful heart, with such beauty within, with such
    beautiful love, to share and to give! .. To love so true is such a
    beautiful thing, even when God ends up comforting! .. Thank
    you ever so much for sharing this! .. Ever so many
    10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! +++++
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  • (7/24/2018 11:43:00 AM)

    Such a beautiful poem dear Poet! Thanks for sharing this masterpiece with us (Report)Reply

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  • Aj Anwar (7/9/2018 9:59:00 PM)

    Beautifully written. And yes, we all come back to the last line, the question of 'wound', despite all the beauties in the garden. Love it! (Report)Reply

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  • Robert Murray Smith (6/11/2018 11:17:00 PM)

    I keep revisiting this beautiful poem....Twinkling stars wrapped in black carpet....These beautiful lines are magnificent. (Report)Reply

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  • Ramesh Rai (6/1/2018 4:09:00 AM)

    Marvelous. Soul is the garden of love. Fabulous.10+++++ (Report)Reply

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  • Bill Cantrell (5/10/2018 4:05:00 PM)

    This by far is your best poetry, you have done it in this poem! ! ! This should be poem of the day, rarely do I see a poem this well penned! ! (Report)Reply

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  • Robert Murray Smith (4/15/2018)

    A wonderfully creative write that fills the heart with delight. (Report)Reply

    Rini Shibu(4/15/2018 7:17:00 AM)

    Thanks Robert for revisiting..! ! !

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  • Kumarmani Mahakul (4/12/2018 12:43:00 PM)

    So beautifully inscribed. A marvelous poem on love shared nicely. Thank u dear Rini. (Report)Reply

    (4/12/2018 1:23:00 PM)

    Thanks Kumar for reading this poem.., ! !

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  • Jez Brul (2/14/2018 6:59:00 AM)

    Beautifully crafted poem of love...more power.. (Report)Reply

    Rini Shibu(2/14/2018 7:20:00 AM)

    Thanks for your visit Jez..! ! !

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  • Bipasha D (1/14/2018 8:38:00 PM)

    No Rini, love life is sometimes the balm... (Report)Reply

    Rini Shibu(1/15/2018 11:15:00 AM)

    Thanks.. It's mixture of all

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  • Sakalabaktula Sairaj (12/4/2017 3:34:00 AM)

    its wonderful.. so nice one keep it up dear (Report)Reply

    Rini Shibu(12/4/2017 4:16:00 AM)

    Thanks Sairaj

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  • Fog Runner (10/21/2017 3:29:00 PM)

    Indeed, I read this as 'sexual' in nature. And it occurs to me that I have behaved as the honey bee numerous times in my life and might therefore be inclined to tell the story from his selfish point of view (a creative experiment) . Thanks for sharing your cohesive perspectives on the irony of erotic love's temporary rush. (Report)Reply

    Rini Shibu(10/21/2017 10:32:00 PM)

    Thanks for your comments Fog..
    Rini

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  • Rajnish Manga (10/20/2017 1:42:00 AM)

    Fragrance of my nectar allured honey bee
    Filled me with beauty and added colors to my life.
    stolen all my charm...my elangance
    Does love life give only wound? .....// Thanks for sharing a philosophical poem.
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    Rini Shibu(10/20/2017 2:18:00 PM)

    Thanks for reading this poem Rajnish

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  • Dr Dillip K Swain (9/29/2017 8:10:00 PM)

    I am lost in your ardent aroma..what a charming line? The piece of work is simple in its totality but carries a lot of implications....I loved the poem the words have been place! Congrats (Report)Reply

    Rini Shibu(9/30/2017 12:17:00 AM)

    Thank you so much Dillip for visiting this poem..
    Rini

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  • Subhas Chandra Chakra (9/22/2017 1:50:00 PM)

    You sucked my nectar everyday..
    Flew away I couldn't see..
    Filled and stored all your hive..
    You have stolen all my charm...
    lost my elangance

    The beauty of losing elegance, the contentment in satisfying someone's desires, the real elegance is there in being stolen to the ultimate level, when the one stealing it is the one you love most.

    A nice topic chosen by the great poetess to surface her hidden talent, treasure of love and passion within heart, stored for the dream prince.
    Thanks for sharing this poem.
    10++++
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    Rini Shibu(9/23/2017 1:17:00 AM)

    Thank you so much subhas..nice remarks

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  • Avik Datta Gupta (9/20/2017 1:59:00 AM)

    The answer is No, it gives birth to great thought processes like this one from you. As Shelley had rightly said that our sweetest songs are those that tell of saddest thought (Report)Reply

    Rini Shibu(9/21/2017 1:08:00 AM)

    You are right Avik.. When our songs are more sweet when it comes from pain

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  • Poet Poet (9/16/2017 12:34:00 PM)

    http: //www.poemhunter.com/poem/loneliness-411 (Report)Reply

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  • Poet Poet (9/16/2017 12:34:00 PM)

    When one is young
    and love ensues
    why don't you all
    initial Caps lose
    that's for compy's need
    not poetry indeed

    See this as an example
    young lady
    and its so difficult to trace your comments
    so you may
    PM them..
    Thanks

    Try this typing version
    and see your own reflection
    in your poetic version
    lady poet will ye

    My Best wishes
    to thee
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    Rini Shibu(9/16/2017 12:57:00 PM)

    Thanks for your suggestions poet.. Will see to it

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, April 29, 2017

Poem Edited: Thursday, June 22, 2017


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