Soul in the garden of love
It's like paradise on earth
Twinkling stars wrapped in black carpet
Fresh energetic buds ready to burst
Waiting for the dawn to embrace the warmth of sun
Fragrance of my nectar allured honey bee
came near and whispered to me
Am lost in your ardent aroma..
You are my life, you are my world..
Softly kissed and tickled to bloom my heart..
Filled me with beauty and added colors to my life..
You sucked my nectar everyday..
Flew away I couldn't see..
Filled and stored all your hive..
You have stolen all my charm...
lost my elangance
Withered on the ground never you knew
this will be the end when you return..
Does love life give only wound?
Hi Rini, In this poem, love has been treated differently by you. Although you tried to state that love is meeting of souls: Soul in the garden of love) , right from the very next line referring to PARADISE, you deviated from this statement towards sensuality: Fresh energetic buds ready to burst Waiting for the dawn to embrace the warmth of sun Fragrance of my nectar allured honey bee came near and whispered to me Am lost in your ardent aroma.. You are my life, you are my world.. Softly kissed and tickled to bloom my heart.. Filled me with beauty and added colors to my life.. You sucked my nectar everyday.. alluding to the bodily pleasures. Then comes the separation: Flew away I couldn't see.. And the pain: : : You have stolen all my charm... lost my elangance Withered on the ground never you knew this will be the end when you return.. Does love life gives only wound? Do I find here a reflection of the famous poem VEENA POOVU by great Malayalam poet Kumaran Aasan? Nice work.. Congrats.. A 10+++
I have to read the poem veena poovu..when you are in love, you feel as if you are in paradise but of the time it doesn't last long and the second part shows how the charm is stolen in the absence. Thanks a lot Unni
You sucked my nectar everyday.. Flew away I couldn't see.. Filled and stored all your hive.. You have stolen all my charm... lost my elangance The beauty of losing elegance, the contentment in satisfying someone's desires, the real elegance is there in being stolen to the ultimate level, when the one stealing it is the one you love most. A nice topic chosen by the great poetess to surface her hidden talent, treasure of love and passion within heart, stored for the dream prince. Thanks for sharing this poem. 10++++
Fragrance of my nectar allured honey bee came near and whispered to me Am lost in your ardent aroma.. You are my life, you are my world.. full of passion and love. tony
Withered on the ground never you knew this will be the end when you return.. Does love life give only wound? ... .. charming poem
Such a heartfelt poem about love and loss. The ending of the poem is the highlight of the piece. Does love life give only wound? Brilliantly penned.
So lovely poem, , , , , , right 10 No narrow path Thursday,6th September 2018 it has the capacity to make it flowery Love has no narrow path it makes you breathe, freely without the fear of death and keeps intact your commitment to the faith Hasmukh Amathaal Mehta
Ever such beautiful heart, with such beauty within, with such beautiful love, to share and to give! .. To love so true is such a beautiful thing, even when God ends up comforting! .. Thank you ever so much for sharing this! .. Ever so many 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! +++++
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
You have stolen all my charm! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
Thank you Edward.....