Haiku By The Dozen Poem by Perdita Young (Hanna Wang)

Haiku By The Dozen

Rating: 5.0

Back from dream, still in trance
Fire fights blazing in back streets
Making heart's fierce beats

Peeps of friends' gardens
Feast my eyes with flower boughs
Dancing autumn breeze

Each's busy writing
Only me idly roaming
Blog almost barren

Haiku is rippling
Back here a fashion, washed
To its origin

Haiku exquisite
Hard to define or estimate
Still puzzled at times

Flowers are in bloom
I look long at one of them
Thy visage I deem

Same names, know not why
To swans I turn to inquire—
A soul mate of mine?

Gardening with thee
Talking and laughing with glee
Bright day short for me

Here to pick the worms
In your garden full of glee
Short is day for me

Th' profound word you sent
Is still giving off fragrance
Meaning is still veiled...

Pedants I loathe in life
Formality is such pain
Vain is parrots' strife

A bow on the back
He rambles the rivers 'n lakes
For the lowly folks

Sight of maple leaves
Reminds me o' frost where you live—
Good care of yourself


Tuesday, March 6, 2018
Topic(s) of this poem: friendship,joy,poetry,respect,sleep
Dr Dillip K Swain 15 March 2018

Beautifully penned! I find a unique pattern of a dozen haiku placed together! Liked Haiku II most!

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Perdita Young 15 March 2018

Thank you for the visit, Dillip. Glad that you like it.

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Nudershada Cabanes 06 March 2018

A lovely string of haiku. I used to write haiku in this form to make a story. Wonderful.10

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Perdita Young 15 March 2018

Thank you for the comment, Nudershada. Haiku seems too tiny a form to hold what we hope to convey.Very attractive, though.

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Leon Moon 06 March 2018

Oh and was it intentional to add an extra syllable to the first section? :)

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Perdita Young 10 March 2018

No no, not intentional but out of clumsiness. Thank you for pointing it out.

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Leon Moon 06 March 2018

Hey, this is kind of a synchronicty because I've never seen this form before except in my own writing, which I uploaded last year and reuploaded yesterday called 'The Prince's Dream', and in other one's, I was wondering if you had seen it before writing? Considering you said this was made in 2011, I guess not! In any case, great write, really enjoyable - Check out mine to see if ya think there's any correspondence!

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Perdita 10 March 2018

Hi, Leon.It's a pleasure to discussion poetry with friends. I began to read and write haiku (5-7-5) in 2011 in my blog and these are just practice. A lot room for improvement. Thanks for the invitation and surely i should read yours...Going there.

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