Haiku: Puddle Reflections Poem by Walterrean Salley

Haiku: Puddle Reflections

Rating: 5.0


Sky in a puddle.
Trees in a pond - Prism of
Light on window pane.

Friday, July 29, 2011
Topic(s) of this poem: nature,reflections
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Walterrean Salley 02 October 2015

Thank you Fabrizio for the valuable information.

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Fabrizio Frosini 15 September 2015

And.. may I suggest.. don't give a 'title' to your haiku.. 'haiku' don't have titles.. you can just use the 1st line as sort of a 'title', it would be enough Plus: better use a 'dash' as a kireji to separate the two different 'ideas' / images.. ''Sky in a puddle Trees in a pond — Prism of Light on window pane. '' Thanks again for sharing your lovely haiku. Ciao

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Fabrizio Frosini 15 September 2015

Very good! I like this haiku, Salley.. it has got the inner quality of the 'classic' japanese form and (even if a kigo is missed*) it answers its 1st request: a contraposition between 2 images of the world/nature/environment, with a 'oh! ' - a subtle wonder, before the beauty/mystery of nature.. (* also a tiny minority of japanese classical haiku don't express a kigo)

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