Her Innocence Poem by M. Asim Nehal

Her Innocence

Rating: 5.0


The night passed with eyes wide opened
by looking at the moon passing through clouds
time bubbles busted one by one as
I desperately looked here and there
and time was crawling as if defeated by a tortoise

My wait was dashing like cheetah chasing deer
Night slowly passed, the moon also subsided
Sun was waiting to charge in and
The twinkling hopes were just about to crash

Eyes glittered back like diamonds
and my ages wait was over
she appeared from the mist
With fluffy fur and beaming smile

She apologise for coming late
and the reason she said was amusing
The angles were taking beauty tips
and this went for the whole night.

Monday, February 8, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: love,waiting
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This poem is about my wait for my beloved, whole night she kept me waiting and finally with first sun-ray she appeared with an excuse so simple yet acceptable......
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Edward Kofi Louis 12 February 2016

With Joy in the arms of your lover. Thanks for sharing.

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Souren Mondal 09 February 2016

I agree with Nosheen. Waiting for the one we love has a charm of its own, too painful yet too pleasing.. And in the end when the beloved arrives, all the waiting is paid off to perfection. A romantic offering Asim. Thanks for sharing :)

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Nosheen Irfan 09 February 2016

Waiting for beloved has a charm of its own. Though moments are agonizing but once the beloved appears, it seems worth the agony. You have used some very rich imagery to describe a night of wait that was fulfilled at dawn n the innocence of the beloved made all the pain go away.10

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Kelly Kurt 08 February 2016

It is easy to let impatience draw the wrong conclusions. I'm glad it all worked out

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