How I Proposed....... Poem by NEETHA SASIDHARAN

How I Proposed.......

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I rehearsed, practised...
even my mirror seems confused.
Should i bent my knees n sing
or just take out the ring? ? ? ?

Hope she'll be alone
n i hope i'll get it done.
Gonna go, hoping against hope
that she won't give me a 'nope'..

Finally, the sun dawned on the day.
OH! I'm trying to be gay.
But my heart seems to disco
n seems to say 'don't go'.

OH! ! never knew being so cool
is not meant for a fool..
Hey! ! but i'm not tensed
n dude..keep your confidence..

Red or white or green? ? ?
YUCK! ! green is bright n red is mean.
White shirt is perfect
n blue jeans will go with it.

Ready! Let me take the ring...
'Be cool', I'm saying.
Over to her house and
ask for her hand.

Reached! Hey? Isn't that she? ? ?
n dat guy? ? who's he? ? ? ?
n why are they hugging? ?
My heart seems to have stopped beating..

Aaarrgh...feels like dying.
I should've known.
I can't handle this, anyway.
Should i run away? ?

I was turning to go
when i heard a 'yo'.
She came to me n said
'meet my brother..come n sit'

We chatted and he parted
We looked at each other n started..
'I LOVE...' n burst out laughing
and i gave her the ring..

She took out a red rose and
we moved on hand in hand..
That's when i hit it..
what he said was so right

- when u r young everything
seems like the end of ur world....

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
hey! ! ! first of all...dis is just imaginery......n ohh..nothing else...tthat's it...hope u liked it...

ps: i know that d title z not dat gud..


pss: : i couldn't get any other title...is there anybody who could help me out? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Sumanta Roy 20 November 2012

nice but u can stop at 'we moved on hand in hand '. It might better

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Neela Nath Das 18 August 2012

Very nice job, Neetha, the budding star of Poem Hunter!

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Mark Dillon 15 August 2012

good writing, you got the feeling in there when the green eyed monster raised its head, nice one.

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Claudia Krizay 05 August 2012

I love this! ! ! Keep up the good work- CAK

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Justin Reamer 05 August 2012

Good poetry. I like it a lot. You have a great rime scheme, and I must say, you are a good poet. Keep writing, and you will continue to get better. You're doing a great job.

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Chinedu Dike 20 February 2018

Beautiful romantic poem nicely penned from inner recesses of the heart with conviction. Lovely and very passionate. Thanks for sharing Neetha and do remain enriched.

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Dr Antony Theodore 26 September 2015

A wonderful imagination dear Neetha.. so nice i chuckled as i finished reading. it is rhythmic. thank you

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Rahul Sharma 23 February 2014

ice breaking! ! ! nicely penned down Neetha, keep going: -)

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Ramesh Rai 31 August 2013

congrat the rising star crossed horizone.keep going ahead

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Muhammad Mirash 10 January 2013

nice poem, i like it verry much

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