I Am Poem by Crystal Pierce

I Am

Rating: 5.0


I am a horse on a carousel. Living life in up and down motions while my mind spins around itself. It just keeps going round and round and around. Never ending. I am a small twig on a tree during a snow storm. I'm waiting for the pressure to finally make me collapse and break. I am the badge of anxiety that I wear on my chest. It's what I let everyone identify me by. The girl who lets everything get to her and holds it back to the point she's crying in class during a presentation. The girl who sits at home in her closet with the sharpest knife she has. And with each stroke of it, making her skin look like red ink stained paper. I am but a horse on a carousel going through life in up and down motions, on the same path that goes around and around and around.I am.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

A pensive poignant write. Something amiss!

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Bri Edwards 23 January 2018

favorite lines: I am the badge of anxiety that I wear on my chest. It's what I let everyone identify me by. The girl who let's everything get to her and holds it back to the point she's crying in class during a presentation. several of your 'sentences' may not be considered 'complete sentences' by my ex-teachers. but i would probably write them the same way. anyway, WE GET poetic license to cover our butts. to MyPoemList. bri ;)

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Bri Edwards 23 January 2018

I am but a horse on a carousel going through life in up and down motions that's on the same path that goes around and around and around. ..................i'd put a comma after I am but a horse. AND AFTER motions. OR i'd put a comma just after motions, but delete that's. i'm assuming the horse is on the same path, not the carousel. thanks for sharing. (to be continued) ...

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Bri Edwards 23 January 2018

The girl who let's everything.............let's would mean let us..........to me! ha ha. try lets. :) Living life in an up and down motions.....you left out the an when you typed the last two lines; i like it withOUT the an. :) i DO like the poem. :) (to be continued) .....

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