I Am Left, On My Own! ! ! Poem by Sandhya S.N

I Am Left, On My Own! ! !

Rating: 4.3

Was it on a starry night? ! !
Was it in a dusky day? ! !
I heard a clarion in my heart! !
I heard that whisper soft at heart! !

Here you end this journey, and
Here you start for that destiny

I was thrown out pitilessly;
To a rolling typhoon tunnel;
I was made to crawl and sigh!
To fine-tune with the novel high;

Hardly had I left tunnel;
I was struck by that lightning;
To realise it as my triumph
And struggled hard to let it high

I heard that mumble in my heart
In a soft and sweet voice
As a lovely proclaim to me
Keep on going; U will be fine

Now I have a doubt at heart
U may feel it at my face! !
Am I now a new born babe? ? ! ! Or
Am I hearing my death knell? ? ! !

No one can supersede! !
The superpower of that mystery!
Only that could be done!
Is just to face it; that ordeal! !

No one could extend their hands! !
To console or condole me! !
I realise that mystic truth
That, I am left, on my own! ! !


A candid and powerful look at the great beyond.Thanks for sharing.

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C. P. Sharma 19 February 2009

There is an incompleteness and uncertainty in the life of all of us. Our mind is unable understand it and the senses cannot feel it. Our intutive power which is the link between us and the Absolute is weak. So, we swing between the joys and sorrows. A good attempt. You started very well but faltered a bit in the middle. Well done, keep it up. CP

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Miriam Maia Padua 19 February 2009

very touching....i like the words written i can relate to it though i'm not being left alone..but being attended with much attention overly cared of can also feel that way...like being left alone...don't know what to decide and what to do... ...your piece is an expression of pain and doubt...of joy and assurance.... then finally ended sadly.... very convincing...very realistic....our life is just like this.... nice write....

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Lynda Robson 19 February 2009

A touching sensitively written piece, we all feel uncertain of our futures sometimes, very well put, 10 Lynda xx

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Lalitha iyer 20 February 2009

Dear Sandhya, (I am a Trivandrum native, my house at Sreevaraham, student of Womens College and at present in Kochi.) I am touched by the pathos in your poem and I wonder at 31, probably married with kids, what tragedy befell you

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Surya . 12 May 2009

it is good u realised it so early life. it is said even children do not belong to parents.they are simply under their care only. rest is the work of Him.nice poem.posted 10. surya

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Riya Riska 26 April 2009

Sandya, this piece was truely expressed my feeling.. Some questions which haunt my soul as always.. I do enjoy it.. Keep writing my new friend! Take care.

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Rajkumar Mukherjee 08 April 2009

Dear Sandhya, If we believe in birth, death and re-birth, then we certainly know we are to carry it alone. But someone who has heard a clarion call in her heart, why at all she should be sad in her writing? We might have to crawl and see our children doing the same. That's life. Enjoy it.So much of question marks and note of exclamations made the road of the poem a little bumpy, may I say so? Still it is a good effort. I give you --9--Rajkumar N.B.-May I request you to read my poem 'Symphony' and see whether you like the flow and the rhyme. It is my first visit to your city.

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Ershad Mazumder 11 March 2009

Excellant. But to express your feelings and emotion you used many many words.Keep in mind that poetry is not prose. But still a good piece.

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Carl Harris 11 March 2009

This is certainly a fine enough poem, Sandhya, but you got carried away with the punctuation in it. You don't need all those exclamation marks where one will suffice, and especially not after a line ending with a question mark. Also, using U for you is improper in poetry, but fine on the internet shorthand e-mails that are used today. And the word 'Or' after the end of the 3rd line of your sixth verse and all it's excessive and unneccessary punctuation, should simply be the beginning word of the 4th line of that verse. All that aside, I liked this poem and it was very expressive and well told, except for that excessive punctuation.

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Sandhya S.N

Sandhya S.N

Thiruvananthapuram, Kerala, India
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