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I Am Tired Of Being A Secret

Rating: 4.8

Why I have to hide
from others
when I am
your husband
and better then
those that look at me
like a burning oven
they are no better
then me
they are in so much misery

you need to check their
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Strong in more ways than one, flawless and runs together smoothly. Well written! <3Payyton

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Wow. The lack of capitaliztion and punctuation made it run together in a wondeful way. Strong, yet hiding weakness.

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rago rago 31 March 2009

Really fine. Oh dear, the culture talk the most accept it. You can`t run away. Well penned and a good work.

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 28 March 2009

An interesting write. A suspense could be prevailed throughout if the word 'husband' should have not been used in 4th line of the poem.

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Greenwolfe 1962 27 March 2009

As I've said before, I don't particularly like the vertical line structure. But be that as it may. I really enjoyed reading this. It held my interest and I was thinking about what a nice little work of prose this would be. This writer can write. He has a gift for making it interesting. GW62

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*I <3 U IAN* 05 April 2009

A strong and great poem

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Merna Ibrahim 05 April 2009

Wow, great poem, i really like it and ur style is great! ! ! ! ! thanks Merna

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Reshma Ramesh 05 April 2009

aweeeeeee that is such a touching write........i hope u find stronger reasons to come out in the open..............god bless

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Hazem Al Jaber 01 April 2009

why you should hide.. there is no reason to hide.. if you really love her, ., you shouldn`t do..even you should be proud.. so nice and well written.. hazem al..

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 31 March 2009

Nice and free from emotional conflict that one may keep hidden in 'secret'. One who is able to strip the layers of pain away, discovers and values the 'self' with a more appreciation of others.Very nice depiction.

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