If God ever wishes to befriend me,
First I shall tell him,
'Wait, let me feel You once'
And I shall stretch my hands to Him.
In the meantime I shall touch Him unlike you all,
I shall touch His eyes and ears,
I shall touch His nose and then
I shall put my hand on His chest on left to feel'That'pulse!
Meanwhile He will be smiling at me
And He will be thinking I am mad and idiotic.
But I shall be happy if I feel none of them in Him
And I shall be unhappy if He has any of them.
'He lives there in our minds', you will all say, my friends,
'And we feel Him ever and ever', you will soon add.
Soon will I begin to assume for once
'God, befriend them for once as they are aliens to You'!
If God ever wishes to befriend me,
I shall prefer to be shot on the toe by a savage**
And I shall lie on a cross and nail myself on it.
The frowns on your faces, my friends, will haunt me then!
-Sharp criticisms are welcome-
I presume Valsa Mam`s God is everybody`s God and it will be quite unbecoming of Him to throw such surprises for me later. And for that reason alone, I may have to write another poem from His abode and it will be titled THE INCORRIGIBLE DUO.
@Dinesh Sir: I dont want to fume a debate, as if I did, that will be like a cactus posing equal to a banyan tree. But a few points sir. 1. You said nothing but Humans, that too the vast majority of humans alone are haunted by God and the concept of God. 2. You said that since such people count is far insignificant to the trillions of species in earth. 1) Now let us see these sentences. If, the number of people who believe in God doesn't form a significant sample out of total population and hence dejected, the same would apply to to stronger sceintific minds as well since their size is more or less the same! 2) Earth happens to be between Venus and Mars. Okay. That is in Solar system which is in Milky way along woth Alpha Centaury. Beyond? Lets say Universe as a whole. How did it emerge? From mass? How did mass emerge? Big Bang Theory. Before that? Stardust. Before that? How will you scientifically explain the emergence of the first ever unit of energy?
Almighty/God is a concept we develop and accept. Your idea of touching and feeling him is very reasonable in my view. I don't know where you will find a savage when God has befriended you. Please see my poem 'Almighty' when you have time. I went with another approach. I am sure you will get lot of discussions and hope you will find a consensus. Thank you for a thought-provoking poem.
Dinesh this time you went with very plain discussion abt god's existence, would much better if you insert symbols and metaphors........ caz for such gigantic themes more sublime tone is best suited Anyhow the attempt is mind blowing... P.s. would like to invite you to read my new one (how little i understand) playing the same tune
Dear Ozark Mountain Homegrown and Matt Mooney, I have asserted the non existence of God all across the lines and my conditions for befriending Him clearly point to that. If theists are ready to accept any kind of God just because they think He is there, I am daring enough to say it is not possible for me. I request you to read my poems/.submissions of the kind when you feel free and I shall be reading yours too. Regards..
This fine poem comes so close to God it's hard to believe it was written by an atheist. There is a touch of doubting Thomas after the Resurrection about it. Pope Francis recently spoke with great understanding on the subject of atheism. Anyway I admire the poem.
God and Nature first made us what we are, and then out of our own created genius we make ourselves what we want to be. Follow always that great law. Let the sky and God be our limit and Eternity our measurement. a very unique and thought provoking write sir...
Gd lives in our hearts and minds. He is forever and forever. excellent write.
I feel very elated reading al the innumerable comments on this poem............as you have rightly pointed out, God is one, he resides in each ones heart, n if gotten a chance to befriend him, means nothing less than being with him in heaven.............ur last para on getting shot / crucifixed, death be it in any manner, ulimately the sole destination would be near God, the only path of befriending Him...........a gud write Sir
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Dinesh, you have always something up your sleeve to make the scene burning! How can you call Him Valsa Ma'm's God? I fear He might say to me... 'You praise me with your mouth and honour me with your lips, but your heart is far from me'....! In God's kingdom, the last shall be first and the first, last! So who knows if Mr. Dinesh Nair would once look down upon Valsa madam from Heaven's high seats! ! I feel you really want to be befriended with God!