Life's Transience Poem by Valsa George
Life's Transience
Dawn slowly slips into dusk
Sun into the deep waters plummet
Day light will pave way to dark
And this in endless succession shall repeat
Grass in green meadows shall wither
Trees once clad in green livery will be bare
Youth into infirmity will slither
The body through long use will wear and tear
None can escape the scathe of time
Those who live only for dime shall be put to shame
We are only players in life's pantomime
Until cut down by the scythe of time
The changes time brings we have to discern
Even the beauteous forms will lose their charm
All into Death's vault should return
Therefore love your life doing no harm
tran·sience ˈtranSHəns, -ZHəns, -zēəns/ noun noun: transience; plural noun: transiences; noun: transiency the state or fact of lasting only for a short time; transitory nature. the transience of life and happiness - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - 'plummets'...........i think :) 'wither/bare/slither/tear'...............i love these rhymes! i don't know if i've ever heard scathe as a noun, not a verb. i recall hearing of someone getting through an accident unscathed. but, yes, scathe is a noun as well: an injury; a harm. [ i checked! ! ] i thought maybe scythe; after all, The Grime Reaper carries a scythe, i believe, though i've never seen the real reaper! ! ! not yet! OH! speak of the Devil! ! ! ! i had read no farther than: None can escape the scathe of time....... before i thought of scythe. maybe my unconscious noticed it in a line farther along in the stanza? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Those who live only for dime shall be put to shame............dime? are you SURE you didn't mean dinner? ? ? ======================= yes, compared to a Bristlecone pine, or even a Galapagos tortoise, or some of those Bible dudes, we 'normal' humans die young. but too many (in my opinion) live TOO LONG! i think the life span of a horse is long enough, and i'm WELL PAST THAT! ! yes, do no harm. easier said than done. think pollution! : ( bri ;)
Very well-rhymed, sweet and short poem on the transience of the world with an effective message at the end to live a sane life without harming anyone or anything. (10)
Dawn slowly slips into dusk- - - the skillful use of alliteration of both the d and the s gives this line a sumptuous and lovely glide. Incomparable! And this in endless succession shall repeat- - - - - - - - - a perfect way to say it- think about it- -could it ever be said more poetically? so resonantly? I can't imagine how. and look at the consonance in endless succession - -words and sounds so beautifully chosen then we have the message- - love your life doing no harm - - I have a feeling Valsa lives her life in accordance with this
Susan.... through your analysis, you have given an extra sheen to the poem! I am a fan of your critiques! Thank you so much!
What a wonderful message that the poem carries through its narrative. Thanks for sharing it, Valsa ji. I am tempted to quote a few lines from the poem: Day light will pave way to dark Trees once clad in green livery will be bare None can escape the scathe of time
Thank you so much Rajnish sir! Your uplifting and encouraging words are much appreciated!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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And yet we waste it in a worthless chase And regret it all when the truth we face For wisdom only with age can we find For the young are only pleasure inclined
Loke... you are indeed gifted How well your thoughts are scripted Into fine verse, words are knitted Sure, among gifted poets, you're listed!
Foolishly we think life is to hoard And much wealth eventually is stored But it leads to nothing but discord, When life's values are totally ignored!