Logic Games (Repeating Words) Poem by David DeSantis

Logic Games (Repeating Words)

Rating: 3.3


Sameness sets,
when unable to vocalize
the thoughts
that pursue it near.

pain gets,
when unable
to bridge a gap
that complacency
has sheared

complacency conquers
when pain has taken
the last ambition
to be found in fear

while love falters
when lovers
cease to communicate,
a constant
lack of tears

Lately,
no matter how many lovers i take,
i find neither
pain nor complacency,

and in that
is my
logical fear.



Copyright (c) David DeSantis

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Original Unknown Girl 17 April 2008

I like this, very clever with the first line of each stanza rhyming, works to great effect - but above all it's the message that comes across. Seems it's the same no matter what age. Good penning. HG: -) xx

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Emancipation Planz 17 April 2008

Consistent reasoning by cleverness.... you'll figure it out at your TENder age..

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John Tiong Chunghoo 29 April 2008

the working of a logical mind. good david.

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Duncan Wyllie 28 April 2008

Very well written piece of excellence David Intelligent, but more than that, , the emotion comes across intact Love duncan X

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R H 23 April 2008

There is a logical progression of thought as you reason each emotion in this introspective musing on relationships. An intriguing write David, j x

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Mattie Jay 17 April 2008

i really enjoyed this poem for its preciseness and crispness! keep it up!

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LOVEFOOL Aka 17 April 2008

Stuning beautiful eloquent and profound I can't think of anything else to say you must be really proud of this piece thank you for giving me the chance to read it Nik

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