David DeSantis

Rookie (01/29/85 / Utica, NY)

Logic Games (Repeating Words) - Poem by David DeSantis

Sameness sets,
when unable to vocalize
the thoughts
that pursue it near.

pain gets,
when unable
to bridge a gap
that complacency
has sheared

complacency conquers
when pain has taken
the last ambition
to be found in fear

while love falters
when lovers
cease to communicate,
a constant
lack of tears

no matter how many lovers i take,
i find neither
pain nor complacency,

and in that
is my
logical fear.

Copyright (c) David DeSantis

Comments about Logic Games (Repeating Words) by David DeSantis

  • john tiong chunghoo (4/29/2008 5:00:00 PM)

    the working of a logical mind. good david. (Report) Reply

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  • (4/28/2008 2:05:00 PM)

    Very well written piece of excellence David
    Intelligent, but more than that, , the emotion comes across intact

    Love duncan X
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  • (4/23/2008 3:33:00 PM)

    There is a logical progression of thought as you reason each emotion in this introspective musing on relationships. An intriguing write David, j x (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2008 8:00:00 PM)

    i really enjoyed this poem for its preciseness and crispness!
    keep it up!
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  • (4/17/2008 6:57:00 PM)

    Stuning beautiful eloquent and profound I can't think of anything else to say you must be really proud of this piece thank you for giving me the chance to read it Nik (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2008 6:27:00 PM)

    I like this, very clever with the first line of each stanza rhyming, works to great effect - but above all it's the message that comes across. Seems it's the same no matter what age. Good penning. HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2008 5:48:00 PM)

    Consistent reasoning by cleverness.... you'll figure it out at your TENder age.. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, April 17, 2008

Poem Edited: Thursday, April 17, 2008

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