Sameness sets,
when unable to vocalize
the thoughts
that pursue it near.
pain gets,
when unable
to bridge a gap
that complacency
has sheared
complacency conquers
when pain has taken
the last ambition
to be found in fear
while love falters
when lovers
cease to communicate,
a constant
lack of tears
Lately,
no matter how many lovers i take,
i find neither
pain nor complacency,
and in that
is my
logical fear.
Copyright (c) David DeSantis
I like this, very clever with the first line of each stanza rhyming, works to great effect - but above all it's the message that comes across. Seems it's the same no matter what age. Good penning. HG: -) xx
Very well written piece of excellence David Intelligent, but more than that, , the emotion comes across intact Love duncan X
There is a logical progression of thought as you reason each emotion in this introspective musing on relationships. An intriguing write David, j x
i really enjoyed this poem for its preciseness and crispness! keep it up!
Stuning beautiful eloquent and profound I can't think of anything else to say you must be really proud of this piece thank you for giving me the chance to read it Nik
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Consistent reasoning by cleverness.... you'll figure it out at your TENder age..