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Moonlight

Rating: 5.0

The passage from cradle to grave
A voyage of sheer consciousness
Some make it with laugh and fun
Some make it a total mess

Childhood and tender youth
For everyone, these times are naïve
Innocence reins, simplicity prevails
Always vibrant always alive

It is the adult who feels the burden –
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Edward Kofi Louis 01 July 2009

A very nice piece of work. Thanks for sharing it with us. Edward kofi Louis.

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Oneline Poet 24 June 2009

Well thought out and put together..

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Mikayla Carpenter 20 June 2009

Very unique. Nicely written: ] 10++ from me! !

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Shashendra Amalshan 20 June 2009

oh! ! ! ! this is an inspirational rite indeed...specially for the budding youth sir...please invite some young people to read this one... 'You’re a winner”, existence whispers The life force serenades you You look around in sweet raptures You feel good about what you do And if you did have a tougher luck Or if you did not have the smarts The going can be topsy turvy If you couldn’t figure life’s charts' people in this site make me feel better, when i was feeling down and out...now i m sort of a okay....hey yet now that i m caught in university work..hard to come to site like i used to do...but still do! ! ! ! ..to read such words of wisdom, and encouragement! ! ! ! ! great write10+++ regards shan

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Jasbir Chatterjee 20 June 2009

Yes, you are right, for some success comes easily and life seems very gentle on them and some just 'strive and struggle'. But then the meaning of success also varies. A quote attributed to Ralph Waldo Emerson says, 'Success is to know even one life has breathed easier because you have lived.'

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Marcella D 18 August 2009

very creative poem you made

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Forest T. Jones 05 August 2009

thank you for the invitation. i like how you analyze human emotions in this poem. I especially like these two stanzas: You’re a winner”, existence whispers The life force serenades you You look around in sweet raptures You feel good about what you do For some the delight easily comes They float as they get it right Other, happiness rarely earns After a toil or even moonlight I am very big on positive poems. you really bring out the positive in these stanzas. but one thing: I didn't get why you called the poem moonlight. i like the poem but there are some weak elements to it your form is great but no rhyming patterm more like a open or free verse. ...

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Vanita Thakkar 16 July 2009

Good observations and reflections in the poem. Good words of compassion, consolation and credit to unsung, unappreciated efforts. Regards, Vanita.

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Londiwe Buthelezi 15 July 2009

i agree with shashandra...my fav line is 'you are a winner, existense whispers...

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Majida Abdul Latif 08 July 2009

living our lives is very important because if we dont live our lives then who well. I love this peom specially the title.

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