Negar Gorji

My Sky

my sky has had no moon,
and i am afraid of darkness!
my stars are crying,
and i cant relax them!
i wanted to send breeze to clean their tear,
but there was no gravitty of moon for flying!

Poem Submitted: Saturday, October 6, 2012
Poem Edited: Saturday, October 6, 2012

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missing a freind.

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  • Daniel BrickDaniel Brick (7/26/2017 8:41:00 PM)

    This poem is made up of 3 2-line passages: the first two couplets show the problem, the last one shows the failure of a solution. The core problem is a cosmic collapse when the moon loses its gravitational force and the darkness resulting scares you, but then another cosmic failure: stars' nightly shining is replaced by crying. And
    you realize you cannot correct these disasters because of the moon's initial collapse. Despite your fear of darkness, you want to intervene and help., but that's where the poems ends - with good intentions paralyzed. From you note, I realize this poem is not a science fiction scenario to play out in action. It is symbolic of how helpless you feel because of missing friend. That makes the poem one 6-line metaphor of loneliness. I like that because it shows how truly youvalue this friend.

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  • Amir Hosein AbdolmalakiAmir Hosein Abdolmalaki (1/30/2016 4:29:00 PM)

    جالب بود. خیلی دوست دارم شما هم یه نگاهی به شعرای من بندازین

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  • Dr Tony BrahminDr Tony Brahmin (12/19/2015 8:40:00 AM)

    my stars are crying,
    and i cant relax them!
    i wanted to send breeze to clean their tear, A wonderful poem. great imagination and so much love and passion in simple and few words. this is poetry. thank you. tony

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  • Alookh (matin)Alookh (matin) (9/8/2013 12:43:00 PM)

    i love the last line! ! !
    p.s all of ur poems have the best possible ending! :)
    thanx

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  • Farshad Gorji (12/8/2012 1:02:00 PM)

    4 answering 2 your poem i suggest u 2 listen 2 katty perrys song specially 2 the(firework)

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  • Farshad Gorji (12/8/2012 12:59:00 PM)

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  • Reihaneh Jalalian (10/28/2012 2:11:00 AM)

    nice poem but why do u think like there's no hope? ? ?
    sky can shine again.... :)

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  • Ellias Anderson Jr.Ellias Anderson Jr. (10/12/2012 12:49:00 PM)

    Missing a friend must be so hard. i can understand it. you have written this one so deeply with your inner feelings. i love it.
    Nice poem.

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